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A Weight On My Chest

A Weight On My Chest

A Poem by SheActsLikeSummer
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A poem.

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I have a walrus
sitting on my chest,
its tusks digging into
my hips
and its tail flopping
far out of
reach.
Its weight presses
on my throat
and my tears get trapped
inside.
I want to scream
but I can't
and I can't lift this weight
off my chest.

© 2013 SheActsLikeSummer


Author's Note

SheActsLikeSummer
I took me such a long time to remember how to spell weight... I'm ashamed of myself.

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I like this write alot. Wonderful indeed...:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


A walrus you say, dear me!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Haha don't feel bad it took me forever to remember how to spell "rain". ...I spelled that right, right? Ohmygawd!
ANYWAYS awesome poem it was short and cute and just lovely and I almost suffocated believing there was a walrus on my chest but then I realized it was just my fat cat. AWESOME JOB! :D

Posted 7 Years Ago


this is awesome and i could picture it which is a sight i dont want to see but its a great write

Posted 7 Years Ago


a great way of putting it..using the walrus........good job the carpenter wasn't with him...Great poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

7 Years Ago

:) Thank you.
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I love the picture, the choice of words and how you have tackled this theme creatively. It's full of originality and that makes it really scream. Written amazingly. I love it!

Posted 7 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much, I really appreciate it. :)
Great work, I think a walrus was the perfect fit for this poem......how much do those suckers weigh?? Must be a lot

Posted 7 Years Ago


C.C. Marx

7 Years Ago

I saw the name and I was like hmmm shes a clever one haha
SheActsLikeSummer

7 Years Ago

:) Well thank you. I take pride in my cleverness.
C.C. Marx

7 Years Ago

As you should hard to find people like that these days
Such a good metaphorical poem!! And i think picking a walrus was a perfect choice because of all the symbolic inferences you can make with its anatomy!

Posted 7 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

7 Years Ago

Thank you. It really means a lot.
Love this! Amazing as always

Posted 7 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

7 Years Ago

Thanks so much. I'm really glad you liked it.
A very different metaphor. Interesting. Gets the feeling across.
I think when you wrote "its tucks" perhaps you meant "tusks"?

Posted 7 Years Ago


SheActsLikeSummer

7 Years Ago

Ha ha, yeah, sorry about that. I completely missed it. Thanks. :)

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Added on January 24, 2013
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SheActsLikeSummer
SheActsLikeSummer

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I wish there was a single moment in my life that summed up who I am. Just a short snippet of time that I could copy and paste here so I didn't have to rack my mind for something to say. But I kind of .. more..

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