Silence

Silence

A Poem by SheActsLikeSummer
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Darkness envelops me...

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Darkness envelops me,
Alone for the night,
So I bask in an eerie silence,
A deafening silence,
Alone for the night,
As darkness envelops me

© 2012 SheActsLikeSummer


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SheActsLikeSummer
I don't know, it's kind of a work in progress but sort of not. Please help me!!

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This is your work in progress?!? Impressed. My work in progress is generally not that put together :) I like it, it's simple but makes a statement.
I think this is a good write.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This is very good for a work in progress!

I suggest adding a stanza speaking about coming from the darkness or something. I'm not sure which direction you want this poem to go...

Posted 9 Years Ago


Well....i hate giving opinions on how to change writes, but one thing did strike me. I don't know if it will help, but if you leave line 4 where it is but also copy it into after line 2, the lines would mirror each other throughout. but I think its fine the way it is.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on April 15, 2012
Last Updated on April 15, 2012
Tags: dark, quiet, silence, night

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SheActsLikeSummer
SheActsLikeSummer

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I wish there was a single moment in my life that summed up who I am. Just a short snippet of time that I could copy and paste here so I didn't have to rack my mind for something to say. But I kind of .. more..

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