Silence

Silence

A Poem by SheActsLikeSummer
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Darkness envelops me...

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Darkness envelops me,
Alone for the night,
So I bask in an eerie silence,
A deafening silence,
Alone for the night,
As darkness envelops me

© 2012 SheActsLikeSummer


Author's Note

SheActsLikeSummer
I don't know, it's kind of a work in progress but sort of not. Please help me!!

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This is your work in progress?!? Impressed. My work in progress is generally not that put together :) I like it, it's simple but makes a statement.
I think this is a good write.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is very good for a work in progress!

I suggest adding a stanza speaking about coming from the darkness or something. I'm not sure which direction you want this poem to go...

Posted 11 Years Ago


Well....i hate giving opinions on how to change writes, but one thing did strike me. I don't know if it will help, but if you leave line 4 where it is but also copy it into after line 2, the lines would mirror each other throughout. but I think its fine the way it is.

Posted 11 Years Ago



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Added on April 15, 2012
Last Updated on April 15, 2012
Tags: dark, quiet, silence, night

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SheActsLikeSummer
SheActsLikeSummer

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I wish there was a single moment in my life that summed up who I am. Just a short snippet of time that I could copy and paste here so I didn't have to rack my mind for something to say. But I kind of .. more..

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