Be Heard

I want to be heard,

To have people hear my voice,

And listen,

Listen as it echoes through alley ways,

Off the walls of secluded streets,

As it makes it's way,

Up elevator shafts,

And creeps underneath doors,

Seeps through cracks in the side walk,

I want people to hear me,

Listen to me as I scream from a mountain peek,

My voice thrown over the countless valleys,

And hills before it,

Hear my voice as it catches in the wind,

Sifting through leaves,

Dashing past single blades of grass,

As my voice runs up electric wires,

Pouring into a room with the speed of light,

Be heard over the sound,

Of galloping hooves on paved ground,

A wrecking ball slamming into a building,

Having already seen its best day,

Over the sound of Hell's kitchen,

And a middle school lunch yard,

I want people to listen,

Listen to my voice that;s become mixed,

Churned with grains of wheat,

When it passed over a farm,

Way back when,

Blended with the sound,

Of gently trickling water,

That it had picked up over a stream,

Stirred with snow flakes,

Unable to melt away with heat,

And infused with the feeling,

That you're not good enough,

And never will be...

I want to be heard

Author's Note

I hope you like it. (:

Reviews

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i LOVE it!!!

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i love love love love it!!! you're right! your writing has exceled *wipes tear* I'm so proud !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :D so glad your back!

[Distant horizons]

BLB says it perfectly. Good enough for what or who. There's only one you, so don't lose her :-)
Beautifully written piece.

[BLBrown]

I also had another thought...about "not being good enough." It is like, good enough for what? For baking a pie, for flying a space shuttle, for running for mayor, for making the cheer squad, for...what, what, what? What I have learned in my 52 years is that not being good enough must be defined by me...not others' perception of me. If I feel like I studied hard and only got a "C" then that means it is good enough for me on this day. As I have grown older, having a stronger sense of self, a greater level of confidence, is not something everyone understands or even attempts to achieve.

Anyway, sorry to wax philosophical!! Loved the poem.
Barbara

[BLBrown]

Very good writing. You have been heard, by me anyway!!! :) You have a way of describing things that is very strong. I can "see" these things as I read what you wrote.

I like "stirred with snow flakes, unable to melt away with heat," That creates a great visual. You are also, I think, at the end, equating not being heard with not being good enough, an unexpected transition.

Good job.

[Patrick]

I listened...and enjoyed

[patricia]

ooh this is fabulous, so very imaginative and just wonderful