The Other Day

I kissed a boy the other day.

I've never done that before.

I think I could have gotten in trouble.

It was all so sudden.

But that's okay.

It would have been worth it.

We were in the middle of the soccer field.

I had the ball.

He tackled me.

I fell on top of him.

I guess you can see where this is going.

But no one saw.

We were alone.

It was perfect.

I kissed him.

And he kissed me back.

The

Other

Day...

He was beautiful.

      He is beautiful.

Author's Note

This isn't really what I normally write, in fact it's rather different. Anyway, I like it... I think. Lol. Anyway, this didn't actually happen. I'm a dreamer. Ha ha. Please leave a review, what you liked, think could be improved. There's always room for improvement!! :P Thanks so much for the read, you have no idea how much it means to me.

Reviews

[SlightlyOdd]

This was sweet i liked it a lot although i usually try to avoid kissing poems because there usually cliche. With this i was pleasantly surprised. Good work

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks, I really appreciate it. :)

[DA]

Lol I liked this so much actually!! So simple, so Innocent. Big Like XD

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Quirky and interesting, good job!

[Buniheart]

Aww, i love this sweet innocence portrayed in your poem. It sure seemed real to me. :)

[Aehr]

different and nice.. i loved the last line, it was a very good ending!

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like a lot here is the visuality ; this could be a photo, a part of a film, a cut from a French film from the sixties, maybe even black and white. A nice piece of work, especially from someone so young.

[Owlgirl]

Unusual and lovely!! Amazing. :) beautiful wording and formatting

[Chip]

I like it. :) I don't understand the indents in the structure. Sorry if I'm just being stupid. LOL.

But overall, I like the poem. Good work!

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Ha ha, you're not stupid. I just thought it looked cool and, I dunno, helped the poem kind of roll. But mostly because it looked cool. You know, formatting. Thanks for the read. I really appreciate it.

[MoriartyMesa]

This was cute and sweet, very charming, like the shape of the work as well

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thank you. I'm glad. :P

[Distant horizons]

Whether a daydream or not, it has been beautifully worded with an almost carefree feel to it, like all is well with the world. Very well done.

[SheActsLikeSummer]

Thanks so much. I just plopped my thoughts down. Didn't bother with big words, just what ever came to me. Thanks again.