My Greatest Fear

My Greatest Fear

 

 

 

 

_{My fear  isnt about}

 _{Being a lonely old hag nobody wants to be around}

 _{Getting into a crash and not being able to walk}

 _{Dying and being the devils little torture doll}

_{Spiders crawling all over my body}

_{Tight dark spaces that will crush me}

 

_{Oh no}

 

_{My fear is greater than that}

_{It’s the fear of having my family judge my writing}

_{Just think of what would be going through their minds}

 

       _{That goes through her head?}

        _{Is she really thinking about doing that?}

              _{She really needs to see a therapist!}

 

_{I don’t mind having the whole world}

_{judge my writing}

_{But when my family is reviewing it}

_{I get tight knots in my stomach} 

My Greatest Fear is..

_{If they think I’m going crazy..}

Reviews

[WeekendWriter]

The good and the bad.... I'm not very good at sugar-coating and I don't believe it helps.... I'll start with the bad.... Grammar is important, as is spelling. 'Toture', 'then' should be than and 'hole' should be 'whole' to name a couple. Little things really, but if you aspire to be published, those things could make the difference.

Okay, now the good, and there is good in it!! =) I think you give great insight into your inner thoughts and feelings. I really like the first paragraph. You portray yourself as being afraid, without being fearful.

Keep writing.... you've got something going on here =)

[Seashell]

Haaaaa. My thoughts entirely. Funny isn't it....allowing and enjoying total strangers to read our stuff ? Guess we are kinda normal then. Loved this.
Thanks
Babs xx

[Valentine]

I am laughing out loud on this one..witty but possibly true..Our families all seem to have some opinion on our writing..I alswo paint and they have comments on those also yet..they buy them..funny huh..lol.Valentine

[Jessica Mai]

SAME HERE! Although, the spiders all over me would literally kill me.

[Vanessa]

very truthful! just put plain and simple!

[BOB THE BUILDER YES WE ..]

yeah i do that too. but they don;t know how to use the comp so i don't really worry about it that much. they don't even know that i write poems. they don't know that i write things at all

[shayne]

So true! I have to delete my writer's cafe history each time I post, even if I'm on my own computer! At the fear that they'd read my work and think I've gone mad

[Princy]

Holy crow! Wtf! Mine too! Every single line of ur poem! I'd go beserk if they find out about my writing skills! =O

[A]

It is a huge fear indeed. I love it when people read and review my work, but when it's someone close... Different story all-together.

Great piece, nice use of HTML.

[Stephen Churchill]

i'm going through this with the novel i'm working on. i'm a really sociable, outgoing person on the outside but there's so much more to me that no one ever gets to see. the story is fiction and noir and stylized but so heavily based on my life and time in LA, even narrated in my own voice. can't tell you how many people have read excerpts and told me some variation of what you wrote in this piece. nothing negative, really, just that it's crazy to truly get inside someone's head. i think the feelings you touched in this piece are so honest. keep it up.

[Padma]

I liked this one a lot.....i feel similarly...never let my parents see what rubbish i keep scribbling in my tiny secret diary...:)