My Greatest Fear

My Greatest Fear

 

 

 

 

_{My fear  isnt about}

 _{Being a lonely old hag nobody wants to be around}

 _{Getting into a crash and not being able to walk}

 _{Dying and being the devils little torture doll}

_{Spiders crawling all over my body}

_{Tight dark spaces that will crush me}

 

_{Oh no}

 

_{My fear is greater than that}

_{It’s the fear of having my family judge my writing}

_{Just think of what would be going through their minds}

 

       _{That goes through her head?}

        _{Is she really thinking about doing that?}

              _{She really needs to see a therapist!}

 

_{I don’t mind having the whole world}

_{judge my writing}

_{But when my family is reviewing it}

_{I get tight knots in my stomach} 

My Greatest Fear is..

_{If they think I’m going crazy..}

Reviews

[WeekendWriter]

The good and the bad.... I'm not very good at sugar-coating and I don't believe it helps.... I'll start with the bad.... Grammar is important, as is spelling. 'Toture', 'then' should be than and 'hole' should be 'whole' to name a couple. Little things really, but if you aspire to be published, those things could make the difference.

Okay, now the good, and there is good in it!! =) I think you give great insight into your inner thoughts and feelings. I really like the first paragraph. You portray yourself as being afraid, without being fearful.

Keep writing.... you've got something going on here =)

[Aldora Sparrow]

Wow. This really gives a good snapshot into a person's mind. "Being a lonely old hag nobody wants to be around" is definitely something everyone fears. being forgotten is never a good thing. I can exactly relate to your family stanzas. Thankfully, I passed that hurdle and now am trying to open up to non-family (especially my guy friends). hope you can pass it too (If you haven't already) Nice write! Enjoyed reading this! Keep it up

[John Stussy]

Family reviewing someone's artwork is always a bit more intense than a complete stranger critiquing the same work. I think it's because it's closer to home, they mean a lot to you so you don't want them to get the wrong idea about it all. I can identify with this pretty well, my family stumbled across my page and, well, some of them were happy that I was expressing myself. Others shared the sentiment that you fear. Either way, as an artist I believe that any criticism from any source should be simply taken in stride, as everyone will always hold some opinion or another. If this poem can say anything about the rest of your writing, I'd have to say that you're a fine writer and that you shouldn't let anything stand in the way of your creating.

[Forest Green]

Well done: honest look at the vulnerabilities of the writer. You've touched on something very nearly universal. If family likes what we write we doubt the voracity of their opinion; if they dislike it we feel hurt. A true catch 22...

Good work.

[Alicante lullaby]

very welldone,,,our greatest fear actually,,,no one in my family knows i write,,,,never will i let them,,,even not my friends and classfellows,,,wow ,shelby