Letter To My Lover

A letter to my lover.

Dear Lover, 

Things have been so cold

Lonely nights in the bed

I miss your arms around me

Enticing me into bed

With your soft lips

Your hands running down my body

Touching the right areas

 

We get along during the day

While we work together

Side by side

Nobody knows about us

But lover where is the heat?

 

Needing your lips on my warm skin

Hands caressing each other’s bodies

Slowly exploring the world of pleasure.

 

Oh baby look at you in that suit

Working at your desk

Looking so dead sexy

Oh baby i want you so!

 

 

The heat in our affair is dying out

Why do we keep risking all of this?

Let’s save it tonight

 9 PM at Rosemary Hotel

Meet me there..

 

~Your lover 

Author's Note

I'll be writing another letter from the male later on.

Reviews

[The Analog Kid]

I like the idea of "saving it tonight" by reigniting the pleasure at the hotel. I know this is a rough draft. My suggestion is try varying the words with synonyms or other imagery. Very sexy.

Patrick

[Ama May Cooper]

This is great.. the lust spilling from a page filled with pure frustrationg. There is some problem with the flow of the piece tho it feels heavy handed but i cant picture why. On a whole a great piece of work inventive, quick and excitng to read

[Jae]

meow meow

[MattWheatus]

I love this one. Really lucky man whoever gets this! ;)

I probably would have used enticing (5th line down) but that aside another great poem!

[Global Norskie]

Sexy! :)

Suggestions:
togther = together
eachother = each other's
use another word(s) for "each other" on 16th line (so not two lines with same text)

[Matt]

i love the seductiveness of your poetry.

[Huggy Bear]

This is really good. It got me all choke up:) I love it