A demonic romance

A demonic romance

A Poem by Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of Poetry

A bit anti-christian


Blood lusting hunters

skulking like rats




From their master


She is lillith

The outcast of Eden

The untold story

Of a gothic romance in paradise


Stricken down like a leper

She prevails in her bittersweet seductions

That snake of the garden

That hissing hell-hound


She will bring all to their knees

Crippling all good in the world

Draining our lifeforces

The apocalypse is nigh


Those lips so full

Yet behind them a forked tongue slithers


Her glistening eyes make hearts pound

Yet they harbour pure evil


She will bring all to their knees

In a demonic romance

Even the most...




© 2011 Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of Poetry

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Wonderful imagery! It was very dark. This was an outstanding write! Keep up the good work:)

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like this! It provokes very powerful images :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

Nice. I like the way it describes the girl as evil for once and not the dude.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Dark, dark, dark,
Very well written, like the flow.
Good descriptive

Posted 12 Years Ago

Captures evil and darkness! Well written!

Posted 12 Years Ago

very well written...full of emotion and evil..very descriptive as well.. the line:

Those lips so full
Yet behind them a forked tongue slithers

made me cringe... very nice!

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dancing with destruction, like Death at the Masque... well crafted, excellent pacing and imagery for the topic. I personally don't see Lillith as demonic, but it certainly fits the Christian viewpoint on her! great writing!

Posted 12 Years Ago

Deep meaning hidden in gothic like passion. well done

Posted 12 Years Ago

Ooh, this was perfect. :O No corrections or improvements. ;)

Posted 12 Years Ago

this is so cool, great wording, awesome concept and amazing description... i love this

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on February 16, 2011
Last Updated on February 16, 2011


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