Adoration of Sleep

Just a poem for my dearest love

Adoration of Sleep

Falling slowly asleep each night,

I wait for you to overtake me, dear rest.

I happily sink into your gracious arms of slumber,

To be swiftly whisked into a world of silence.

 

And as I am asleep, I joyfully dream of the preceding day, and the new day soon to come.

Dreams completely filled with adventure and chaos,

And despite some dreams being very frightening,

I know my dear sleep faithfully watches over me.

 

I am tragically forced from your loving clutches.

I sadly must rip myself from the last of your love.

And as I dutifully shake the sleep from myself,

I know that the day has already begun.

 

But when you, my dear sleep, joylessly elude me,

I am barely a living being the entire day.

I continuously run into obstacles.

 My only mercy throughout the wretched day is that you will soon mercifully rescue me.

 

After I am to my home, I happily join you again.

And few will ever know the greatness of that afternoon nap,

The joy of tensed muscles gently relaxing

There is peace in knowing that you, my wonderful sleep, have truly joined me again

Reviews

[Tai Ryens]

Relaxing poem, great job! Wonderful use of words, and the flow has some flaws, but it's still amazing. The only problem is with a couple lines being too long, which in my opinion can mess up the flow of someone reading this aloud. If said right, it will blend in with just the others, but going too fast, or slow, can mess up the flow due to only those lines. Those lines are the second stanza, first line, and fourth stanza, fourth line. The long line in the end seems to blend in well enough. Wonderful poem, keep writing!

[Chris]

some good and gentle thoughts expressed... the pace is sometimes uneven but the flow carries through.