when I get through...(REMIX)

when I get through...(REMIX)

A Poem by Shirlena
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An old write of mine

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I say…hey there brethren man

I ducked proposals…didn’t show up in those venues

don’t understand the grin… concluding it’s nerves

knew those were the places for confrontations

they were relentless pursuits on his part

secretly I blushed and enjoyed his lamentations…”When”?

pouting to kiss my hand…being attractive

turned corners and dodged stalking shadows that resembled questions

flinched at debris skipping when the breeze scooted them along like little ones

“Come on children guilt is running upon you”

trailing me as I’m posing… a tight palm beneath my chin

his pleading his case… so very dapper

wrestling with self inquisitions … his impositions though polite

what is my malfunction…what is your plight

thrusting diversions into angst

wanting to the core to indulge but knowing it’s better if not

tired of thinking because the answer is yes to me

but it won’t be yes for him…long as I ‘m planning to hide


mess around on that shoulder of sexiness now... later you lay stark in the mire

 

© 2014 Shirlena


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I love the way you mask personal experience with an attempt to confuse the reader. I know the situation. I know the feelings of anxious longing. Very good piece shirlena. Keep up the good work.I had no idea you possessed an aptitude for the romantic genre as well.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shirlena

8 Years Ago

Honey I am every woman...just kidding. Thanks OC
Lloyd Frieson-Small

8 Years Ago

lol welcome
This is really well done:) great work

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shirlena

8 Years Ago

I'm the same way and pretty adamant about so then trust I'll be finding you asap :). It's just so ha.. read more
A. Amos

8 Years Ago

I exactly understand you, welcome to the club:) I want you to send me RR always one piece a day is f.. read more
Shirlena

8 Years Ago

Oh you don't even have to worry about me doing that...not my MO. I won't send one unless you ask or .. read more
Life is so complex. We want, we don't know what we want, we over think and under act. We dissect and rationalize and at the end of it all we are unsure of the outcomes because we only know the consequences of it all after decisions have been made. A hurricane of a poem.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shirlena

8 Years Ago

I completely agree icelandicblue...thank you for reading and for the insightful review. Look forward.. read more
I'm not too sure about this Shirlena...what was the outcome or what will it be. He's a nice guy, polite, complimentary...but still he's just not... Hmmm, I think I need a beer and think on this for a while.

Still very cool my friend, you do dance with words so very nicely.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shirlena

8 Years Ago

Oh awright then Jack...I ain't never played with you before but I'll know better next time :). I wa.. read more
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Sandwich'd between two women, I hardly think he'd feel the pain. ;-)
Jack...

8 Years Ago

My favorite kind of sandwich....
"what is your plight

thrusting diversions into angst

wanting to the core to indulge but knowing it’s better if not

tired of thinking because the answer is yes to me

but it won’t be yes for him…"

Some people do wrestle with self inquisitions trying to win their identity back or reclaim their destiny if it swerved from the right path. Some skip life and hide in loneliness and some skip debris of the self on water to see the endless circles of uncertaintity...An excellent write...



Posted 8 Years Ago


Shirlena

8 Years Ago

Woooh Sam I love that you get this poem and you see the turmoil in this write...you and me...I knew .. read more
Sami Khalil

8 Years Ago

Yep. You are welcome( kindredly) if there is such a word ...:)..........................
I thought your comment said 'an odd write' of mine at first, thought to myself, as if....you have that unique quirky style that I thoroughly enjoy. Sounds as if he won this round.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Shirlena

8 Years Ago

In his dreams he won this round...I might be a chicken but I know how to work a man girl lol. Thank.. read more
Frieda P

8 Years Ago

Ha laughing here, I have no doubts sista... ;-)

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Added on February 20, 2014
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Tags: illusion, deception, pretending, relationships

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