when I get through...(REMIX)

An old write of mine

I say…hey there brethren man

I ducked proposals…didn’t show up in those venues

don’t understand the grin… concluding it’s nerves

knew those were the places for confrontations

they were relentless pursuits on his part

secretly I blushed and enjoyed his lamentations…”When”?

pouting to kiss my hand…being attractive

turned corners and dodged stalking shadows that resembled questions

flinched at debris skipping when the breeze scooted them along like little ones

“Come on children guilt is running upon you”

trailing me as I’m posing… a tight palm beneath my chin

his pleading his case… so very dapper

wrestling with self inquisitions … his impositions though polite

what is my malfunction…what is your plight

thrusting diversions into angst

wanting to the core to indulge but knowing it’s better if not

tired of thinking because the answer is yes to me

but it won’t be yes for him…long as I ‘m planning to hide

mess around on that shoulder of sexiness now... later you lay stark in the mire

 

Reviews

[Lloyd Frieson-Small]

I love the way you mask personal experience with an attempt to confuse the reader. I know the situation. I know the feelings of anxious longing. Very good piece shirlena. Keep up the good work.I had no idea you possessed an aptitude for the romantic genre as well.

[Shirlena]

Honey I am every woman...just kidding. Thanks OC

[Lloyd Frieson-Small]

lol welcome

[A. Amos]

This is really well done:) great work

[Shirlena]

Thank you dahling so much for your presence :)

[A. Amos]

I love reading your work and you're most welcome

[Shirlena]

Backatcha, so I don't know all of what I haven't read of yours...it would help if you would send me a few that I haven't. I don't ask everybody this because they tend to over send but I am asking you :).

[A. Amos]

Its OK my dear you don't have to return me any favor, I like to support my friends and you're one of them:)

[Shirlena]

I'm the same way and pretty adamant about so then trust I'll be finding you asap :). It's just so hard to get to everybody you want to when you got each person sending you ten a piece, so people send me stuff I ain't even never heard of. I try to be courteous but how do you ask people to read something of yours when you've never bothered reading something of thiers...that's people though lol. I'm sorry didn't mean to vent.

[A. Amos]

I exactly understand you, welcome to the club:) I want you to send me RR always one piece a day is fine:) not ten in a day:)

[Shirlena]

Oh you don't even have to worry about me doing that...not my MO. I won't send one unless you ask or you're greedy :). Thanks A. for asking me to...cause for you it's done...occasionally.

[icelandicblue]

Life is so complex. We want, we don't know what we want, we over think and under act. We dissect and rationalize and at the end of it all we are unsure of the outcomes because we only know the consequences of it all after decisions have been made. A hurricane of a poem.

[Shirlena]

I completely agree icelandicblue...thank you for reading and for the insightful review. Look forwarding to reading your work soon.

[Jack...]

I'm not too sure about this Shirlena...what was the outcome or what will it be. He's a nice guy, polite, complimentary...but still he's just not... Hmmm, I think I need a beer and think on this for a while.

Still very cool my friend, you do dance with words so very nicely.

[Shirlena]

Well you're not supposed to know the answer...you find your imagination with this one Jack. It's a poem about a tumultuous relationship and I do cliff hanger poem lol. Thanks for reading my friend.

[Jack...]

Still hanging on here...when does the new season start?

[Shirlena]

I'm glad to see you are. You'll find that sometimes it's all in how we choose to look at things. If we have certain mindset we can always change it, no need to stand in situations and make our lives more problematic...cause there's always a new issue taking a number. When does the new season start? When you decide it does ;).

[Jack...]

Hmmm...I think I just got lectured. :)

[Shirlena]

I thought you asked me a question...I'm sorry that wasn't a lecture, that was encouragement.

[Frieda P]

Just take him down Shirlena and be done with it, ha...sorry couldn't resist. ;-)

[Jack...]

I am just joking my friend...it is Friday night...I get a little loopy by the end of the week. :)

[Shirlena]

Oh awright then Jack...I ain't never played with you before but I'll know better next time :). I was trying not to hurt him too bad Freida (wink).

[Frieda P]

Sandwich'd between two women, I hardly think he'd feel the pain. ;-)

[Jack...]

My favorite kind of sandwich....

[Sami Khalil]

"what is your plight

thrusting diversions into angst

wanting to the core to indulge but knowing it’s better if not

tired of thinking because the answer is yes to me

but it won’t be yes for him…"

Some people do wrestle with self inquisitions trying to win their identity back or reclaim their destiny if it swerved from the right path. Some skip life and hide in loneliness and some skip debris of the self on water to see the endless circles of uncertaintity...An excellent write...

[Shirlena]

Woooh Sam I love that you get this poem and you see the turmoil in this write...you and me...I knew we were kindred :). Thank you so much for your review it is both insightful and refreshing.

[Sami Khalil]

Yep. You are welcome( kindredly) if there is such a word ...:)..........................

[Frieda P]

I thought your comment said 'an odd write' of mine at first, thought to myself, as if....you have that unique quirky style that I thoroughly enjoy. Sounds as if he won this round.

[Shirlena]

In his dreams he won this round...I might be a chicken but I know how to work a man girl lol. Thanks for just being here Frieda.

[Frieda P]

Ha laughing here, I have no doubts sista... ;-)