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This poem attempts to taunt the people who impose forced discipline and on those who believe in hollow fame and fake brotherhood!

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Sun revolves around the Earth,

Isn’t that a curious phenomenon?

There are rules and laws since I’ve taken birth

You have to follow, you can’t run.

 

Within my mother’s womb, as a foetus

I floated from one wall to another.

Now the entwining rules eat us

The prodigious list only grows longer.

 

For the brotherhood is neither meringue

Nor the notes of a mezzo

Where has the love gone, I rue,

Locate it, I’ll find the boat to row.

 

There can be no discipline, no love,

Until the conscience strikes

It would neither come from twitter followers,

Nor from facebook likes!

 

Author's Note

This poem co-relates the forced discipline, which loosens as soon as the forcing agent goes absent, and the absence of true love, which is also in forced form! I think both the love and discipline are co-related in this manner that they have to imbibe in us and not just adsorb!

Reviews

[Saumya]

This was a completely different poem from what i had read before..:)
i was firstly excited to see the topic, and reading it proved it to be a really wonderful opportunity...
like the distinctive subject, the poem also is great...:) i completely agree with all your thoughts displayed here...
the beginning was great, i completely enjoyed reading the entire piece:)
well done:)

[Shivam Murari]

Thank you so much Saumya :)

[Bluefire]

This is pretty good. It speaks of the fake world people live in when they spend all their time trying to get likes and followers on all them social networks, then think they've actually done something good and congratulate themselves when all they've really done is nothing for the real world, the one that matters.
Well done. ^^

[Shivam Murari]

Very truly said, Bluefire! Thanks for reading and reflecting! :)

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[Shivam Murari]

: )

[Will]

A powerful message you send here. People are often caught up in the idea that "likes" are going to validate their world views and save the polar bears. You debunk this well, and you do it in a very well put-together fashion

[Shivam Murari]

Indeed, great poet! Thanks a lot for the review :)

[Will]

Anytime, my fiend

[Will]

*friend... Lol

[Shivam Murari]

LOL : )

[Rita L. Sev]

No love or discipline without conscience... so true. And there is really no feeling in a facebook "like"; unfortunately we have allowed this little "thumbs up" to define our popularity, and done away with real worth in our friendships... Well done!

[Shivam Murari]

Yes, indeed! I'm not against making new friends on facebook, but are they (leaving the rare exceptions aside) really TRUE! How much helpful will they be, except liking our photos and updates?

Thanks a lot for coming and expressing! :)

[Vani Jalagar]

There can be no discipline, no love,
Until the conscience strikes
It would neither come from twitter followers,
Nor from Facebook likes!

so true........the question "what's on your mind?" for uploading status itself seems to be so confused. No love is expressed in these realistically.

[Shivam Murari]

Really true, Vani! In fact I pity those immature people who pride on having 100 likes on their photos most of which come from people who don't care if you exist or not!

[Vani Jalagar]

that's the fact :)

[Shivam Murari]

: )

[TL Boehm]

I concur. love and discipline are intertwined because both serve others and not just ourselves. Great write.

[Shivam Murari]

So truly said, Boehm! Thanks a lot! :)

[Sami Khalil]

I thought that the planets revolved around the sun. Or you are being a little sarcastic here to get a message across...A splendid read and write...:)

[Shivam Murari]

Oh, of course it is sarcasm! :P There are so many rules we follow in our daily life. Some of them are as illogical as sun revolving around Earth!

Thanks a lot, Sami! :)

[Sami Khalil]

Good to know. I thought so. You are welcome...:)

[Shivam Murari]

: )

[Sami Khalil]

^^~^^ :)...

[Frieda P]

Facebook mostly gives me a fookin headache unless I want to see pictures of friends & family, but I really enjoyed your musings here....

[Shivam Murari]

It does indeed. Most of the people out there are so weirdly fake!

Thanks for reading and commenting!

[Coyote Poetry]

Facebook is good for the family. Easy to get in contact with complete family with a simple note. Facebook is not set-up for logical conversation. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Shivam Murari]

Agree with you, Coyote. Thanks a lot for reading :)