BONUS NUMBER #2 : In Your Thoughts

BONUS NUMBER #2 : In Your Thoughts

A Poem by Shivam Murari
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The stinging nature of heart to keep remembering about people it should not!

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In Your Thoughts



 

It’s raining, raining

Oh Baby! It’s raining,

You made it rain, don’t you lie,

You knew I wanted to go out, so why?

 



It’s sunny, sunny

Oh Baby! It’s sunny

You made the sun’s heat scorching

You knew I wanted to do sightseeing.



 

It’s cold winter

Oh baby! It’s just too cold

You made the snow fall

Just when I had gardening call.

 

Yes you are responsible, doubtlessly

Your hate, your jealousy, needlessly

I hope you hate, hate

At least I could be in your thoughts!



© 2013 Shivam Murari


Author's Note

Shivam Murari
I impersonate a relative of mine, who is not with her lover any more. She keeps suspecting him for everything imaginable in this world. The hidden reason being that she expects he is still thinking about her.

I hope I did justice to female emotions and way of expression.

Speak your heart out.

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Fantastic,
Simple in wording but grasps through a diverse repetition the many ways he was influencing her, whether it be real or imagined. It also left me to ponder if she were still thinking of him and therefore the seasons bore his absence in her life. Either way great piece.
Chris
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

Thanks a million Chris! :)



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First paragraph was like Rihana's Ellaaa Ellaaa..Umberallaa :D

I liked the 'In your thoughts' Thought Shivam :)
Keep writing buddy ..

Posted 7 Years Ago


I like your rhyming scheme, reminds me of the late Lou Reed's lyrics.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

thank you Sheema :)
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Pam
I really liked it! I'm actually kind of speechless, so it's REALLY hard to do a review right now. Keep being inspired!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

Thanks Pam :)
This would make a wonderful song.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much Boehm :)
This one sounded more like a song, I enjoyed it. Good one

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

Thank you so much :)
For some reasons, I remember Rihanna's song "Umbrella" in your first two lines.

"At least I could be in your thoughts" echoes my own wishes to a particular someone. Thanks for this. :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

That is because the chorus of "Umbrella" was an inspiring factor for this poem! Funny that you're th.. read more
Azure Montessa (Blue)

7 Years Ago

Haha, my pleasure! :)
The poem no doubt is nice...
But I'm more interested in the pic added in the bottom :S
Where did you get? And it is painted by whom?

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

Random searches on Google images :P
Fantastic,
Simple in wording but grasps through a diverse repetition the many ways he was influencing her, whether it be real or imagined. It also left me to ponder if she were still thinking of him and therefore the seasons bore his absence in her life. Either way great piece.
Chris
100/100

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

Thanks a million Chris! :)
Well, if your saying women blame their significant others for everything from rain to snow falling, I can't agree with you. Some women, maybe, but not all!

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

PS- I know women are better at forgiving and moving on than men are!
Barbara Walker

7 Years Ago

You're right, I read that but my last thought before I reviewed was when you wrote "female emotions.. read more
Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

ow . thats fine :)
Reads like a weather Deity screwing with the locals. Good Poem

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

7 Years Ago

Thank you Ric :)

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Added on September 28, 2013
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Shivam Murari is a student, currently aspiring to get into a good college. He loves to write poems, loads of them. He usually gets very random ideas, which he thinks are pretty cool, and in the proces.. more..

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