BONUS NUMBER #2 : In Your Thoughts

BONUS NUMBER #2 : In Your Thoughts

A Poem by Shivam Murari
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The stinging nature of heart to keep remembering about people it should not!

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In Your Thoughts



 

It’s raining, raining

Oh Baby! It’s raining,

You made it rain, don’t you lie,

You knew I wanted to go out, so why?

 



It’s sunny, sunny

Oh Baby! It’s sunny

You made the sun’s heat scorching

You knew I wanted to do sightseeing.



 

It’s cold winter

Oh baby! It’s just too cold

You made the snow fall

Just when I had gardening call.

 

Yes you are responsible, doubtlessly

Your hate, your jealousy, needlessly

I hope you hate, hate

At least I could be in your thoughts!



© 2013 Shivam Murari


Author's Note

Shivam Murari
I impersonate a relative of mine, who is not with her lover any more. She keeps suspecting him for everything imaginable in this world. The hidden reason being that she expects he is still thinking about her.

I hope I did justice to female emotions and way of expression.

Speak your heart out.

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Fantastic,
Simple in wording but grasps through a diverse repetition the many ways he was influencing her, whether it be real or imagined. It also left me to ponder if she were still thinking of him and therefore the seasons bore his absence in her life. Either way great piece.
Chris
100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a million Chris! :)


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Even without the pictures the entire poem is great. :))

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Even without the picture the entire poem is great. :))

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks Akira :)
LOVELY! and you chose very good pictures too which makes it quite appealing...


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Gaurav :)
I love the way you have presented your poem, the pictures are great and the description in your words creates great images. A fine write. Margaret

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Margaret :)
It's a curious business, getting into the head of someone else... it can become strangely addictive to see the world through another's eyes, but it's difficult to do.
That said, I think you did a fine job here. Keep up the good work.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a lot, Landred :)
Now this poem is in MY thoughts. I think every person could relate to this poem at some point of time in his life or the other. You write so relatable poems! :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a million, Kit :)
clever and well observed write..well done

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a million Leslie :)
This is awesome.How nicely have you impersonated the woman and her feelings. The pictures are strong supporters. Excellent :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a million, Lones :)
Sounds like a good chorus to me! Wonderful job! Emotional.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Rakshit :)
Getting in the head of someone else is difficult but if you know the behavior of one close to you, and the circumstances of the relationship, then I can certainly see how you could pen this poem! It is a good description of one who is still holding onto something is not there, and the images add to the effect!
Nice job!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Shivam Murari

10 Years Ago

Thanks a million Sheila :)

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Added on September 28, 2013
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Shivam Murari
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Shivam Murari is a student, currently aspiring to get into a good college. He loves to write poems, loads of them. He usually gets very random ideas, which he thinks are pretty cool, and in the proces.. more..

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