Lie Beside Me

 

              Lie beside me on this bed of regret,

          And question the speed of existence

 

                  {Baby, we are travelling through the veins of god}

 

    I want them to play your birth at my funeral

       I want them to donate my heart to sensory deprivation

 

                Slow this earth down

                         Until all time has passed,

                          And we fall weightlessly in love

 

               I love it under this thunder,

        Unscathed by extreme time stretches

 

                                For now there is nothing to fear,

                                  And now there is nothing to doubt,

                          And anything could happen to anyone forever

Reviews

[living lavender]

love this piece. the wordplay is beautiful.
my favorite line:
"And question the speed of existence"
{enticing poem through and through.}

[Fran Marie]

I love it under this thunder,

Unscathed by extreme time stretches

life is fleeting
and time is an illusion
so many good lines
within this lovely piece
of poetry..

the ending line
concludes and
comes together
nicely here

"And anything could happen to anyone forever.."

well written

[MOON]

Wow, beautiful life is so temporary, love traveling through the veins of God, donate the hear to sensory deprivation. So many gems as usual.

[CM-Stars]

What a lovely rhythm and imagery to your poem. I just fell in love with this verse. I think I'll daydream about it today.

"Slow this earth down
Until all time has passed,
And we fall weightlessly in love"

Great write!

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words and thoughts.
"Slow this earth down
Until all time has passed,
And we fall weightlessly in love"
I did like the about lines. I enjoyed the complete poem and thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Rosie Brooklin]

Beautifully written! I love the rythmn and imagery of these lines. Well done!

[KCthelastboyscout]

Well structured.wonderfully written.reading this I realize I have to step my game up writing romance

[sette]

i love the metaphors used and an irony at that. this is my first time to review one of your poems and you write amazingly well.

[Alexa Apothic Red]

Wow!! What a stunning piece! I love your imagery and word choices. Original, authentic longing. Brilliant writing!!

[John Fitzgerald]

You’re too kind! Thank you

[kaoswithak]

" I want them to play your birth at my funeral" Was my favorite part, amazing poem. I loved the symbolism, the words used also the way it's structured, trully an amazing piece, congrats!