A Blessing to Me

I would that you

were closer

to whisper in

my ear

what exactly

it is that

we are doing

here.

 

Each moment

that passes

between us

is a blessing

to be sure

yet they are few

and far between

these hours, days

that pass away

when near me

you are not.

 

I linger

wondering

how to make

amends

to this

issue

that keeps us

from being friends-

closer than

we are-

something that I

truly long for

just a bit more.

 

Nothing too fantastic

something, simply

sublime-

it seems you

have infiltrated

my cluttered,

muddled mind.

 

The space there is

between us

is nothing but

a lapse

and I long

to see you again

perhaps before

its time.

 

Is this wrong

I wonder

to long for your

kind smile

and the ever

sweet touch

of your hand

upon mine.

 

Ah yes, it is true

I long for you

to be closer still

to me

yet it can never

be

exactly

as I hope for

as our two lives

meet quite

simply in fleeting

moments

here and there

however, these are

enough to keep

me satiated

I suppose

as I recall that

the blooming

of the rose

comes only once

a year-

I am thankful

whenever you

appear-

this will be enough

for me

in the end you see

moments spent with

thee

again I say

are a true blessing

to me.

 

 

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I don't like the lines, " When near me you are not" it makes the piece feel clumsy in the second verse and the use of the word "thee" after using the word "you" previously in the piece felt a bit off kilter to me as well. Other than that, the piece was buoyant and eloquent with some great romantic nuance like thoughts of him "infiltrating my cluttered, muddled mind" I spot the lonliness in the abscence of this other person in those words without the facts so plainly stated. When we feel someone brings clarity or purpose to our lives, we often do feel cluttered and muddled without them around; a sure sign of the "Missing You Blues." So that was great that you show so much in so few words there. Overall, a good read.

[Amanda-Bodanda]

how do you go so long without seeing your love..i see/read now how you do..you think of him everymoment of each day yall are apart. this poem exspresses whats in your head eachday. i like this! its tough to have distance. you handle it well i see. keep writing!

[Lance]

I disagree with the gentleman below. The poem is far from clumsy...any of it. Excellent. Lance

[Emily B]

How often do I stop by your page and say that you've seen into my heart. I saw myself in your lines yet again. I wonder how it is that you can do that?

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sometimes when we care so deeply for someone we take them any way we can get them even if it isn't how we want it to be... a very sweet a loving write.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

This is full of pure passion, you can feel the love and longing in this poem, it's not sufforcating it's pure and fresh. Nicely written.

[Michael]

Hi S-

Wow, this is really strong. I like the presentation too. It makes it more delicate somehow but does not interfere with the power of its message.

Sorry to not be on more, trying to meet some deadlines, getting work published sure is a love - hate relationship!

Michael