The Beautiful Song

               Look at me while I sing the beautiful song.

                Tell me that without me you can’t live on.
                Stay with me under unclouded warm sun,
                let the rays of light show you a new dawn.
                    Lay with me under glaring starry sky,
             Not ever forgetting that you will always be mine.
                         Be my knight for all my life, 
                  sharing with me unforgettable delights.
                       Soon I will be your lady in white,
           forever singing to you, the beautiful song of our lives.

Author's Note

Maybe a little too romantic and sweet for some....BUT: Why not, hum?!!! 😊😉

Reviews

[emmajoy]

There's absolutely nothing wrong with being romantic or sweet! People can be so cynical about what they call sentiment.. and fair enough to each his or her own. But surely true love and needing sweet and charming words are part of a disappearing world.. Notice this was originally added in 2016, perhaps the isolation we're all feeling now in 2021 highlights what can near enough disappear overnight. To read your beautiful words really is a remedy for sore hearts. Thank you so much for sharing Silmara.

[Silmara McGarry]

You are so right!!! No, I am the one to thank you for your beautiful words dear Emma ;-)

[emmajoy]

Lovely words and am still purring!

[Silmara McGarry]

:-)))))) Great!!!

[D Connolly]

I like your joyful outlook. It's very optimistic and romantic

[Silmara McGarry]

I am sorry D. I don't know for sure but I think sometimes comments appear way after it was written here. I did not see it before. :-)
Thank you indeed, dear!
:-)
Sil

[barleygirl]

I like the way this series of observations also tells a story. A glimpse into the future ("soon I will be your lady in white") is what makes this message more meaningful than just expressing feelings with nicely crafted references to sun, dawn, starry sky, & delights. This glimpse shows me why the narrator is literally singing with happiness.

[Silmara McGarry]

Helooo... and sorry, I don't know how I did not see your review before :-)
Thanks indeed for your wonderful words. Really appreciated ;-)

Have a perfect weekend!

[barleygirl]

No worries . . . I've been off on a tangent myself (((HUGS)))

[Silmara McGarry]

:-)!!! Hugssss

[James]

Wow, I hope you read this to whoever it was written for.

[Silmara McGarry]

:-) No one in particular! Thanks for reading . All best!

[Miss Sharon]

Oh be still my beating heart! This is soooo romantic and well written. I love it.~ Sharon

[Silmara McGarry]

Ohhh.. thanks indeed Miss Sharon! You have me smiling ;-) I am so very happy you love it :-) See you!

[TheLostMind]

Another poem that made me smile.. Again, I love how you make simple things interesting, capturing the reader's imagination.. Idk why but the lines
"Be my knight for all my life,
don’t you dare let me get out of your sight." made me laugh :)

Good job..

[Silmara McGarry]

Thank youu!
I know, it is kind of like she is going to smack him if he let her go...lol....and a bit childish :-)

[Karmee]

Such a real lovely write, I am liking your style,
Very nicely written

[Silmara McGarry]

I am most happy you enjoy it, and so very glad you like my style of writing :-)
Thank you very much indeed, dear!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

The rhymes, words, emotions everything seems so perfect in all your lines. I enjoyed the read.

[Silmara McGarry]

So happy indeed I am, that you enjoy it :-) Thank you so very much for such warm words and your review. See you...

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Your most welcome my friend :)

[Robert Haigh]

Romantic and upbeat. We all need love, and when we find it we should do our utmost to hold on to it.

[Silmara McGarry]

Thanks indeed Robert :-) You are right, we should hold it with everything we got!

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

This poem starts off with so much beauty and grace of imagery and then it takes a turn into seriousness, commitment, of the relationship. But it occurs gradually, inculcating the reader into the relationship, which was amazing writing. Before you know it you're in love with what your reading. :)

[Silmara McGarry]

So wonderfully well putted Cyprian. Thanks indeed for reading it. Your understanding of writing is quite impressive! I really like your reviews and am always happy when you review my work. I must thank you again ;-)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome Silmara, (beautiful name by the way :) You're an amazing writer! Keep up the great work!

[Silmara McGarry]

Ohhh... so kind and sweet. A huge THANK YOU ;-)

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome.

[NathanielAlexander]

A heartwarming poem! One anyone who has been or is truly in love will appreciate to the fullest. I long to read more poems like this!

[Silmara McGarry]

Many thanks indeed for reading it, and your kind an lovely words!!
I will keep on writing them, then ;-) Best Regards...Sil :-)