The Color of Sighs

shared for Albert's Poetry Cafe ~ Poet Craft: Form "The Dorsimbra" with Salvatore Buttaci

 

The Color of Sighs

(Dorsimbra)

Lamé translucence, fading silken dreams
A whisper's brilliant color flickers till
expelled. Its remnants flow in silver streams
A sigh surrounds and empty spaces fill

Eyes close to see
the color of sighs
interwoven
with residual wishes

Alas, a faded whisper lingers near
A breath so laden, light and swirling still
Exhaled and drifting within lucid mists
Lamé translucence, fading silken dreams



 

© 2006 SilentDream (All rights reserved) 5/24/06

Author's Note

Lam�, as intended. Pronunciation (la-MEY) an ornamental fabric in which metallic threads, as of gold or silver, are woven with silk, wool, rayon, or cotton.

Reviews

[Gheeneil]

The imagery brought forth by this piece is that of a sound made by lovers. i dunno if this is some kind of discreet erotica focused on the beautiful soundless murmurs sweetly playing on air. Nonetheless, I like the words being used. They are carefully and artistically chosen to better grasp the colorful beauty of sighs which is best seen with closed eyes. It's well-written. This is truly a masterpiece!

[Michael X]

You are an abstract poetess to capture my own heart as well as every reader who is lucky enough to read your artful craft, I absolutely love abstract variations and you are one of the best I've read, in all honesty.
as this work of tempest seduction, leaves me breathless, the constance, the depiction of a whisper,
the flow send a soft chill through the body, the descriptiveness brings the moment to life with gentle passion that flows like a silk scarf brazing the neck of a lovers intention, beautifully invented loveliness.

[angelina neves]

congratulations for the very well deserved wining!

[Helena]

"Lam� translucence, fading silken dreams
A whisper's brilliant color flickers till
expelled. Its remnants flow in silver streams
A sigh surrounds and empty spaces fill"

Oh what a stunning poem this was! Gentle and delicately penned,
a delight to the senses. Well done! ~ Helena :)

[angelina neves]

wonderful!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

This is beautiful. I will think of this poem whenever I hear a sigh.