Drunk In Blood

A Small Poem

DRUNK IN BLOOD

I've cut myself with your words

I've cut myself with your meaningful stares

I've cut myself with bruises you made

I've cut myself with your constant stabbing of your raping

I've cut myself with you hits

I've cut my with your scissors

I've cut myself with you're knife

I've cut myself with torn paper

I've cut myself with tears

I've cut my my heart with your forbidden love

How deep have i been cut?

I can't say

I can't see

Cuz I'm Drunk in BLOOD!!!!

Author's Note

A Poem I write while pretending to be an Emo.

Reviews

[Lovely Soul]

Very interesting indeed. And dark.

[Mark]

Interesting write.

[Nicholas Antonio Young]

This was pretty good. I like the repetition in it.

[wyrd]

Ok I know I'm old, what's an Emo?
I knew a cutter once a stripper in a burbon street bar. How did you get those scars? I asked her. It was a joke she said. No one understood the punch line. And she smiled, sad a slow.
the subject of your poem is one of great pain and feeling as such I would advise a somewhat lighter hand with the subject. Trust yourself and the subject take a small step back, emotional intensity doesn't need to shout to be heard.

[Ink Angel]

Very powerful poem, Imagery is very graphic to me. Emo indeed.

[just is]

This is a pretty powerful sad read. Well expressed emotions.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of repetition in this poem. Made the point loud and clear. I like the flow of thoughts and the very strong ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Tomislav Petricevic]

This poem is powerful, and repeating the line "I've cut myself" makes it even more powerful. I'd say you've done a good job pretending to be an emo, the poem is very good.