Soulless Apocolypse [Take Your Fire]

This is just a [Horror, Zombie] poem that i came up with, hope you like it! Oh, and it's about Zombies and it's kinda gory i supose. :]

Crawling, Slashing, Creeping

Scratching, Moaning, Reaping

 

Slowly turning

A heart on a stake

Just one touch

This refuge will break

Take your pick, hold your fire

Load your ammo, this is desire

Prepare your weapon

Prepare for blood

A sea of decayed, a wave of soulless flood

 

They crave, they lust, they rule the night

They’ll take your soul in just one bite

Your safety, your humane, will fade away

You’ll be one of them, soulless, portrayed

They’re out to get us, take your fire

Make up your mind, don’t run or hide

This deadly apocalypse has now started

From your loved one, you will be parted

Scratching, Scraping

Your soul for the taking

 

Surrounded, enclosed, they’ve got us fenced

With a slash of their hands, they’ll have you wrenched

Your brain will go numb, your flesh will decay

You’ll hang hearts from hooks for your own zombie array

 

You’ll feed on the flesh, the souls up for taking

With a snap of your jaw, their bones will be breaking

Crunching, snapping, your appetite soothed

For you’re one of them now,

The rotten,

The doomed.

Author's Note

Yeah, so leave your HONEST opinion on this poem - i can take constructive comments, they make me stronger :] So thanks.

Reviews

[Carrion.]

I love this?! it's like.
A m a z i n g! bahaha[x
good job;D

[Larry Dyson]

sorry was just thinking on your comments about what you like..it is a unique poem

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. I like the Zombie movies. Can take your mind to a good place to find time to relax and get away from real life. A excellent poem. Very strong description and story in your words.
Coyote

"You’ll feed on the flesh, the souls up for taking
With a snap of your jaw, their bones will be breaking
Crunching, snapping, your appetite soothed
For you’re one of them now,
The rotten,
The doomed."
MY FAVOURITE bit

[MIngram]

After reading this i felt really calm for some reason. I think it was the interesting details and description that you included. Very appealing.

[Deepsoul1889]

This is awesome! I really enjoyed reading this. It made me feel as if I was actually in the Apocolypse, even though I'm aafraid of zombies XP but really awesome.

[Jordan S]

Wow. Just Wow.

[sherwin]

I dont have a problem with form or anything like that. You chose a interesting subject which is good. I would like to see some more imagery and maybe some free verse?? Break some of those conventional, almost "rules", methods of writing. Give me some soul. But otherwise good job all in all, keep at it.