Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

My chemistry betrays me as insanity pleads before lean-jaded depravity

seen scorn as a decrepit unraveling

of baffling mean-spirited entities gathering deceitfully

for more pandering of reality in a gallery slinging misery entirely...

My sympathy behaves erratically

seethes forlorn as heated apathy forms rapidly

soft-churning rhapsody squirms passionately...

Inevitably heart-warming tragedy occurs.

Fiendishly hard-earned philosophy

turns of metaphor laced individuality...

Blurred and slurred rhymes.

Aggressive lines wormed into the tapestry of sadism

this organisms mechanism of limelight fading posturism

burning eyes turning bright from realism

shading light from mine minds rind empty escapism

slime heavy kinda heady with the infectious algorithm...

 Swirls bleeding lecherous breathing escaping the rhythm of morbid reality

 curiosity yearns for instability

With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree

 gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy

 floating dead in the sea flamboyantly... 

Author's Note

Same poem (mostly)... But now edited... Yay...!

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)

[Chase Dylan]

Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I saw your review, though...
Called my wife over, I was like...
Look at this moddafucker
im dying laughing...
DYING...
Number one review....
Ever...
You wanna know something else...
I do not use dictionaries or thesaurus or any help when writing...

All natural, or it aint happening...

I spell and meaning check on words i already put down, though...

EVERYONE tells me...

"dont write so your reader has to pick up a dict. every 5 secs"
But...

How am I supposed to KNOW what they all know or not...
I let the reader decide his/her intelligence

Cheers at such a pleasant comment...

"Match"...
Do not get carried away, eh, mate...?
Lololol

[Sami Khalil]

You write uniquely with powerful words on steroids that all can enjoy into escapism of life into poetry. Insanity afflicts each one of us to some gender or another; it is how we behave and manage it. Your gallery is full of good stuff.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks muchly, Sami.
That is my whole goal, to provide escape using rhyme.
Fun fact: This took three days on my phone to write, and I did it all on my 15 min breaks at work

[Sami Khalil]

Congratulations. Creative indeed.

[willbradley]

I had to re-read. Not because it was bad! I enjoyed the rhythm of it so much I kinda got lost! Genuinely good work. You can feel the devotion to writing this well. I'm not a pro or even a poetry critic, but I genuinely found myself enjoying this. Nothing negative to say here.

[Chase Dylan]

A super late thanks, Will.
I am certainly no pro, however I like to think I am devoted.
read moreA super late thanks, Will.
I am certainly no pro, however I like to think I am devoted.
Appreciate it

[light and ashes]

In my opinion, this is really genius. I absolutely loved it, but then again I am a little messed up in the head.................I'm giving you a 100 on this.

[Chase Dylan]

A very late thank you, Bubble. We are all a bit mussed in the head...

[light and ashes]

Thank you for the reminder.
You're welcome.

[Mary]

Your poetry has opened up my mind to a new genre, and I love it! I will not pretend I am able to dissect it word for word to uncover hidden meaning (perhaps that isn't the your intention), because I am relatively new to this writing style, BUT it is such a wonderful shower of interrelated words, creating images, all sorts of images; it creates an amazing visual and auditory experience! The rhythm and internal rhyming- genius!

[Chase Dylan]

Mary, thank you so much...!
These are the comments I live for!
To have inspired/opened hearts to a dif. path...
You are spot-on, mate
No intention, really...
Not an intention that matters to anyone but ME, anyways...
Hah
So glad you enjoyed it as was intended...!

[Paul Bell]

Got this image of a serial killer slowly building up for the kill.
Practice makes perfect sort of guy.
Could you imagine the judge reading that line out. So, you were on an itty bitty gallant killing spree.
You just know that's a hundred dollar fine. Mind you, what's that state where they wear pink overalls. That's a punishment in itself.

[Chase Dylan]

Oh damn, mate...
These poems are all so old, good...
But old...
Wanting to re-write a buncha them.
Now that line...
"o, you were on an itty bitty gallant killing spree.
You just know that's a hundred dollar fine"
F*****g love the image...
Haha
Thanks so much, and this was my first ever poem that I finally figured out how to engineer "flow-landscape"
Took 3 days to write cause I wanted "natural" vocabulary...
Turns out...
None of my readers thought it was very natural, lol
...Go figure

[Paul Bell]

Bloody readers. lol

[Chase Dylan]

Rofl... Ikr...

"What an emotional piece! have you thought of using less dictionary?"

I didn't actually use...

"BECAUSE IT WOULD BE SO MUCH MORE RELATABLE!!! AND BETTER AND MORE AWESOMER IF IT CATERED TO MY PERSONAL VOCABULARY, K THX!"

80 percent of critiques in a nutshell right there...

[Fame]

Wonderful piece with great vocabulary......

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved the use of the language.
With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree
gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy
floating dead in the sea flamboyantly..."
The above lines. Perfect use of words.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.

[Coyote Poetry]

Always a pleasure to read your work and you are welcome.

[drew garner]

It reads like Lewis Carrol riffing on Emily Dickinson at first and as cool a trick as that is. their is a confessional quality to the impression, that it projects onto the reader that is astounding.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while.