Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

My chemistry betrays me as insanity pleads before lean-jaded depravity

seen scorn as a decrepit unraveling

of baffling mean-spirited entities gathering deceitfully

for more pandering of reality in a gallery slinging misery entirely...

My sympathy behaves erratically

seethes forlorn as heated apathy forms rapidly

soft-churning rhapsody squirms passionately...

Inevitably heart-warming tragedy occurs.

Fiendishly hard-earned philosophy

turns of metaphor laced individuality...

Blurred and slurred rhymes.

Aggressive lines wormed into the tapestry of sadism

this organisms mechanism of limelight fading posturism

burning eyes turning bright from realism

shading light from mine minds rind empty escapism

slime heavy kinda heady with the infectious algorithm...

 Swirls bleeding lecherous breathing escaping the rhythm of morbid reality

 curiosity yearns for instability

With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree

 gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy

 floating dead in the sea flamboyantly... 

Author's Note

Same poem (mostly)... But now edited... Yay...!

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)

[Chase Dylan]

Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I saw your review, though...
Called my wife over, I was like...
Look at this moddafucker
im dying laughing...
DYING...
Number one review....
Ever...
You wanna know something else...
I do not use dictionaries or thesaurus or any help when writing...

All natural, or it aint happening...

I spell and meaning check on words i already put down, though...

EVERYONE tells me...

"dont write so your reader has to pick up a dict. every 5 secs"
But...

How am I supposed to KNOW what they all know or not...
I let the reader decide his/her intelligence

Cheers at such a pleasant comment...

"Match"...
Do not get carried away, eh, mate...?
Lololol

[Raven Moonchild]

Wow........I just........wow. Words can't even begin to describe how amazing this poem is. It pulls you in and doesn't let go.

[Chase Dylan]

Wow, thanks so much, Raven...

[Raven Moonchild]

I must ask,what mental zone do you get yourself into to write such genius?

[Chase Dylan]

I put on a beat or instrumental... Not much else to it, heh... I do not know if it is genius... Just flow landscape

[Kesha]

A wonderful piece, I loved the rhyme and flow of this one here... the words just jump out right at you ..

[Chase Dylan]

Your words jump out at me, thanks for the fun review, Kesha...

[Kesha]

Haha you are very welcome!

[Nora]

This so strong man ! , when i read this poem i felt like so famous writer wrote it , it's powerful, i love it

[Chase Dylan]

I WISH I was a famous writer, haha... Thank you, Nour... I appreciate the amazing compliment....

[Nora]

My pleasure 😊 and one day you will i am sure about it ☺

[Chase Dylan]

Oh, jeez, well... If you are sure... If only I shared the assuredness... Lol... You are far too kind, thank you again...

[Nora]

You just need to believe in yourself and the God and everything can happen 😊😊 my pleasure again ☺☺☺

[Chase Dylan]

Belief is a powerful tool... That it is...

[Nora]

Yeah 😊 keep believing and you will be 💕

[Chase Dylan]

You are just an overall nice person, eh, Nour_han... Haha... I shall endeavor to keep believing...

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSh..]

Your opening line is strong and initroduces a theme that flows through the poem. I enjoyed reading this I can relate. Your writing is unique and strong. Thank you for sharing.

Sheer Terror

[Chase Dylan]

I enjoyed reading this review, as it was strong and unique... Thanks. ST

[TerryDarcy-Ryan akaSheerTerror]

You are welcome. Silente

[Shasha]

Oh my god, this is beautiful, I always like the way you write, always different words, a vast vocabulary, unlike me. You are an amazing writer, believe me or not, up to you, But you are flawless. Keep writing!!!

[Chase Dylan]

Oh meh gosh... Thanks Sasha... I like the way you review, hah... Vast vocabularies are a pittance compared to real heart... I believe you...! Believe me when I say you are an exceptional writer as well...!

[Shasha]

Aw, you're welcome and thank you.
But not better then you. Maybe one day I will compete with you, just joking! Again, this writing is real nice!

[emmajoy]

Read three times, to self, slowly and stuttering finger beneath each word kind, then.. aloud as if the words were mine. Found more from the first.. why? By reading to self, the initial silence grows and grows and words juggle and nudge each other into near catastrophe.. or perhaps more politely.. mayhem. Each phrase is competing with another, with previous and somewhat what's unknown but surely coming. Not entirely sure about the repeated rhyming but it's not unpleasant and shows amazing language. I believe, sanity is supposed to be framed reality., whereas insanity has lost what it never really had but, isn't aware of the fact. Perhaps? Great and intriguing write, might need to return - when my head's clear!

[Chase Dylan]

EmmaJoy... You have both confounded and dazzled my senses with an absolutely vivid display of insight... It was originally meant to be one big thing, so the repeated rhyming was more... A stylistic choice, heh... I was not sure on making it that way either... You are always welcome to return, and I hope you learn half as much from my writing, as I do yours...

[emmajoy]

I confound myself sometimes, often. Is confoundation a word?

[emmajoy]

Your poem now becomes a weird mantra of goodness knows what BUT has more to say that many oozing langauage that come from other folk.
Long may you reign.

[Chase Dylan]

Lol, long may I reign... If only... I need to setup a new site, pronto...! The trolling on here is outta hand... I am about donzo... Migrations need to commence...

[emmajoy]

How sad that a once first class site has become such a hell-hole. Writing has given way to bullying, perversion, etc.. Mind you, both the latter are simple enough to write.. writing magic takes intelligence and heart..

[Chase Dylan]

I agree, EJ... I have finally completed the first form of our new community-driven website! With live chat, open boards... Custom profiles... It could be the start of something awesome!

[Zephyr]

Well your poems are a legacy:)
You stand out in the crowd of poets!
A WOW work!

[Chase Dylan]

WOW... You have gone above and beyond in terms of lofty compliments paid... Your review stands out in a crowd of reviews... Thanks so much...!

[Zephyr]

Happy to hear:)

[Wajiha Nayeem]

this is wonderful to read...great work!

[Chase Dylan]

An equally wonderful review to read... Thanks...!

[Wajiha Nayeem]

the pleasure is all mine!

[Chase Dylan]

Well... It is a teensy bit mine, as well... :3

[Decidious wind]

This is an intriguin poem. I like how the language is complicated and the rhyme consistent. Sometimes simplicity is beautiful but i often get bored if everything is simple. Keep up the artistic work.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks. DW... I agree... Simplicity is wonderful, however intricacy is my preferred flavor...

[aj milton]

A feast for the vocabulary... You describe:

explicity, the dichotomy and multiplicity of reality ;)

[Chase Dylan]

Ohhhh... I very much like that one... Also, this review is top notch, hah... A feast, indeed... Thanks, AJ...