Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

Chemistry Betrays (Revised)

A Poem by Silente-Write
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Insanity Pleads...

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My chemistry betrays me as insanity pleads before lean-jaded depravity
seen scorn as a decrepit unraveling
of baffling mean-spirited entities gathering deceitfully
for more pandering of reality in a gallery slinging misery entirely...

My sympathy behaves erratically
seethes forlorn as heated apathy forms rapidly
soft-churning rhapsody squirms passionately...

Inevitably heart-warming tragedy occurs.

Fiendishly hard-earned philosophy
turns of metaphor laced individuality...

Blurred and slurred rhymes.

Aggressive lines wormed into the tapestry of sadism
this organisms mechanism of limelight fading posturism
burning eyes turning bright from realism
shading light from mine minds rind empty escapism
slime heavy kinda heady with the infectious algorithm...

 Swirls bleeding lecherous breathing escaping the rhythm of morbid reality
 curiosity yearns for instability
With the itty-bitty fallacy of a gallant killing spree
 gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy
 floating dead in the sea flamboyantly... 

© 2017 Silente-Write


Author's Note

Silente-Write
Same poem (mostly)... But now edited... Yay...!

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the velocity of your perspicacity of the duplicity of words specificity makes the bunny's brain nuerocity spark enthusiastically! LOL.... my god I have met my match!!!! You love words and they love you I know cause they just told me my dictionary just salivated all over my desk and started to groan in an unsightly manner causing me to have to clean up some unmentionable goo... be sure to put the dictionary farther away from the word porn next time. :)

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

11 Months Ago

Words are fun, flow structure is what this was intended for, aha... I f*****g died laughing when I s.. read more



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well constructed yet there's a sense of spontaneity throughout... loved the near/slant rhyming as well as your rhythm and form... It never felt forced or contrived...only critique I might offer is the line "Blurred and slurred rhymes"... perhaps: rhymes that blur and slur. But that's me editorializing...Not necessary at all.


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

I like that, my friend, def' was proposed in the back of my mind. I absolutely use that line, especi.. read more
Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Thank you for the well-constructed and nicely thought out critique, truly appreciate it...!
Fantastic use of wording Silente, makes me feel like I do when anxiety strikes home and the world warps somewhat...this poem is on the edge and viscerally so...superb...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Fantastic warping of my mind, Silver, from the anxious perfection of your insight... Honored to have.. read more
yep lost all my thoughts and I'm thinking how is this even possible...

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

It is not ALL about rhyming, but yes... Well, in my mind.. It IS all about rhyming, but usually... Y.. read more
L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

You're welcome. looking forward to your next masterpiece.
Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

You and me both, lol...
Whoa, your rhyming skills and large vocabulary of words to rhyme with never ceases to amaze me. I can't imagine how much time you must take to think up such a vibrant flow and still put so much meaning in each piece. Honestly, your pieces remind me a whole lot of Sage Francis, which is one of my favorite hip hop artists. Your skill man, it just blows me away!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Everyone does, man, we all hate and question our own stuff at some point... I just click onto a new .. read more
L.C. Jarrette

3 Years Ago

reading your work has inspired me to write even more.thank you.
Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Oh, thank you very much... L.C... That means the world to me... To know my work helps inspire more w.. read more
Ahh! That's really good..i enjoyed

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Really good review, I enjoyed...! Thanks
Excellent and so skillful mastery of words, ideas, rhythm and rhyme! "Gallons of rippling prayers stripped of buoyancy...floating dead in the sea flamboyantly." Tapestry of sadism, ..limelight fading posturism"-Who else can paint a picture like this? No one but you! Loved this.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

I am sure lots of people have artistic ability, haha... But your heartfelt appreciation warms me... .. read more
You're very talented and this is well written. I could learn a few things from you. I'm quite inspired.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Vanessa... I hope to help in any way I can, stay inspired...!
Wow........I just........wow. Words can't even begin to describe how amazing this poem is. It pulls you in and doesn't let go.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Wow, thanks so much, Raven...
Raven Moonchild

3 Years Ago

I must ask,what mental zone do you get yourself into to write such genius?
Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

I put on a beat or instrumental... Not much else to it, heh... I do not know if it is genius... Just.. read more
A wonderful piece, I loved the rhyme and flow of this one here... the words just jump out right at you ..

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Your words jump out at me, thanks for the fun review, Kesha...
Kesha

3 Years Ago

Haha you are very welcome!
This so strong man ! , when i read this poem i felt like so famous writer wrote it , it's powerful, i love it

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

Belief is a powerful tool... That it is...
Nora

3 Years Ago

Yeah 😊 keep believing and you will be 💕
Silente-Write

3 Years Ago

You are just an overall nice person, eh, Nour_han... Haha... I shall endeavor to keep believing...

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Silente-Write
Silente-Write

Denver, CO



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