Gray Named

Black feathers... White shame...

She has a name written in gray letters

black feathers adorn white shame

rage shudders flutters closed

lover ages

beauty a phage

pages turn 

blunders burn

she never decays

a black and white temptress at a midnight soiree

dips the potion in whimsical purrs

feel the stir growing

dark-hearted mistress slurring words 

looking blurred an image folds inward

night boldly creeps beneath wards laced

mirth seething

breathing toxic fumes 

flogged and ripped schemes of survival

sulfurous babble rattles the cage

bile and wonder cease to amaze

raze the vile demon

like cattle we are to her

shine the earth with black blood 

white names of infamy have we in heaven this day 

Reviews

[Kesha]

I absolutely loved this piece, especially these lines
"raze the vile demon
like cattle we are to her
shine the earth with black blood "

Like cattle we are, it seems as though this could be a reference to the modern day America lol. Either way, a wonderful write with vivid imagery, & thought provoking.

[Chase Dylan]

I absolutely love the fact you love this piece, Kesha. You more than welcome to open-end interpretation... That is always the most fun! Heh... I love those lines as well...

[Kesha]

I agree, I've always said that a poem is different to each reader, as it depends on their mood & where they are in life, it can mean something different to the writer & then something else entirely to each reader. Haha. Yes, those were my favorite.

[Chase Dylan]

We share similar views on that, then, Mrs. K... Each individual is so different, what one person sees as red, another sees as blue, etc...

[Kesha]

Yes exactly my point!

[RolandDee]

Gee wilickers boys and girls… I wonder why this vacuous SJW d********g ran away with his tail between his legs? I wonder why that "social writing site" turned out to be a fake effort abandoned almost immediately by it's own creator?

Eggregious hypocritical virtue signaling bully games never work out in the long run. I'm glad you realized how embarrassing your actions were/are. Maybe if you had some substance behind your populist rage you'd be worth something... but alas... you turned out to truly be intellectually vacuous.

And I'm not even going to get into the plagiarism accusations against you. (which is probably the real reason you ran away like the coward you truly are.)

If you play stupid games, you win stupid prizes. Enjoy your shame. I hope you learned something.


Regards,

-- you know who this is... I never blocked you, ya coward. Despite all of your bullshit... you are still welcome to say whatever you want to me publicly or privately. And if you had any balls, personal integrity or honor you wouldn't have had to scurry away like you did. We could of talked like men and I would have been more than happy to debate you. You chose to act like an SJW bully. You did this to yourself...

(also, stop plagiarizing other peoples work... if your that intellectually bankrupt you have to resort to that s**t... maybe writing just isn't for you)

I look forward to your further cowardly silence.

[Abhishek Asthana]

i am very happy with the title of the poem " Gray named"... and the flow of the poem is upto the mark... a very nice description and again an awesome creation of your... great work done S.S

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much, Abhishek... Means the world coming from such a talented bender of words, such as yourself...

[Zephyr]

The imagery you create through your poems is great!
your lines are smoothly complex:)
Keep writing!

[Chase Dylan]

Thank you, Neetha...! Your smooth review is adored...!

[Zephyr]

Always a pleasure:)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Who is this succubus so darkly and tantalizingly described? Wow, the imagery is unforgettable- "black feathers adorn white shame..rage shutters flutter closed"- magnificent! Great rhythm and flow- impacts each line. Master-Class work!

[Chase Dylan]

She is a haunting figment of wordage, aha... Your review is equally unforgettable... Thank you so much...

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Silente,
"Gray Named" Just plain interesting! I am always newly taken by how different we people really are; the content of what we write is the clue and the reality of what is coming from within.
This is the first time I've read your writing and it is so different from mine; like night and day.
Your rhyming style is really fun. It was a refreshing thing to read this.
First line really lends its color; Gray, for the whole poem.
"She has a name written in gray letters." Gray letters, not strong not silhouetted against the page this. It sounds like just a mist rising from the paper. Scary.
Well nice to meet you and read a very early work. I am just a very basic writer, not fancy at all...but just enjoy expressing.
Bless you much. Kathy

[Chase Dylan]

I absolutely agree, KVK, night or light, its all the same day, and should be appreciated as such... So very happy you found joy within the read... I think of myself as quite basic as well... I just enjoy words! Blessings on you, Kathy, and have a good one!

[Isemay]

I'm not usually one for poetry, but this I like.

[Chase Dylan]

Very happy to have sparked an interest in something out of your usual likes... Thanks, Num, for the time...

[Kittenincake]

I love the use of a monochromatic theme throughout your piece.

"sulfurous babble rattles the cage
bile and wonder cease to amaze
raze the vile demon
like cattle we are to her
shine the earth with black blood
white names of infamy have we in heaven this day" - Again your writing takes a raw and dark twist. Your descriptions and layers are what stand out to me, keep playing to your strengths. I would love to see you go more in depth, I think your characteristic details have potential and highlight your writing.

[Chase Dylan]

I love that word... Monochromatic... Thank you.. I shall def' keep that in mind...

[Jessica Lima]

'dark-hearted mistress slurring words'

Hits very close to home. You have this way with words... I don't think I've read anything basic from you. everything is intricate in some way. Great Work as always.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks so much, Miss. Lima, what a wonderful compliment...

[.]

Hmmm. I have read a few of your works to get a feel for it and I just struggle with the style.

Your use of vocabulary and alliteration and word to word rhyme is very good and unique from what i usually encounter on this site. The words pile, line by line, on top of each other until the conclusion, a difficult craft in itself. My main concern is that the style confuses the reader from understanding your meaning.

This is just a personal choice as a reader. By all means continue to write the way you write for many do enjoy this disjointed, unstructured style of writing. Unfortunately, I am just not one of them.

Otherwise, your piece is very stylistic and breathes in a world of its own.

[Chase Dylan]

Thanks for the critique, Dood, I will say, however... Despite the kindness sprinkled within, I am not sure I am picking up on the tone of the review correctly... I am almost positive this piece was quite straight forward... Structurally, it is quite sound, in fact... If anything, my other writing is FAR more abstract... Never concerned about my readers understanding... I hope each and every one of my readers has the intelligence and insight required to make a personal connection within the myriad of words... That being said, to each there own regarding style. Perhaps next time you have something to say, have it be more than "well your style just does not work for me, sorry"... At that point, just read it and move on... The time taken is appreciated, just make sure you do not waste your own day away with neutral criticism... It helps neither party... Otherwise, I will take you into consideration on my next works, thanks again for taking a moment to read...

[.]

Not a critique, just honesty. As readers we all have our own tastes. Not saying there is anything wrong with it. Your wordplay is exceptional. Perhaps i need to read it more thoroughly when in the right frame of mind.

[Chase Dylan]

Perhaps I need to re-read things when in a better frame of mind, myself... I apologize, meant no harm by it... We are absolutely entitled to our own tastes... Guess I got a bit snippy because I worked hard to make this particular piece make more sense than the average... Haha... I am not the best at making concrete sense, in most cases... You are spot on about that... Thanks for the time, again... Means the world to me...

[.]

No problem. I will read more. And will put my thinking cap on next time.

[Chase Dylan]

Your works are def' more than thinking-cap inspired, you are a true artist, and I hope something makes sense to you in the future.