Feels Like Forever...

Feels Like Forever...

A Poem by Chase Dylan
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December...

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Woke up this morning, feels like forever since the mourning of your name...
In shame I hid tethered to fame, a blind grain of sand against a slimy flame
I'm gaining momentum like rain, a zany feelin' bein' clean
weaning myself off the draining lifestyle, my grind paid in dreams
My time stood-still, feels like December when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... 
A starship trooper in September, I ran around in embers
no space vacuum in dust, I grin and shoulder on
In my holster a wand, it sings songs about wrongs
atrocities gonged through the city, a bong hit of infinity
I stare behind me and see her one last time in the rust of spaces left between us
I know she will not see this, I'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it

© 2017 Chase Dylan


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okay I wrote a song about twenty five years ago and reading this made me remember it its a bit sketchy in my sketchy bunny mind but.....
Woke up this morning,
got out of bed
evenings pleasure
drove in my head
don't know what I'm doing
maybe Ill find a job...
oh i can see now
I'll just pack my things and go
(refrain thing)
Life would be better
these things I'm sure I'll know
the Lowcale solution

okay you can go back to your regularly scheduled program :)

I say this partly of the intention of the write and partly because this reads like a song and like my song it sounds like a very happy tune but it is full of unhappy things in a sort of sardonic looney tunes melody
like my locale solution isn't one in dieting (change your lifestyle not your caloric intake!) and (change how you live not where you live and moving) to cure your ills neither is your write of blight and you scream it as such with a sublime beauty in that wonderful voice of yours. Oh yeah I love that you use mourning like me you are one sexy writer silent:) the the the the thats all the bunny has to say:)

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

4 Years Ago

A nice ditty, my friend...
Thanks for it, aha
Morning
Mourning
...Who co.. read more



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You're gifted silente! I love reading your work

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thanks ever so much, Jiya...! I love people reading my work! So fancy that...
this is one of the most straight forward poems of yours i have read so far...i like that you have mixed your enigmatic flare with the concrete ..i feel the pain of it ...especially engaged by "...a bong hit of infinity" ..fantastic says i! and the seeing one last time in closing is sublime the way you put it ... "i'm just a bleeding creature..." is killer in the vulnerable state of your protagonist ...moves my heart out in empathy :(
E.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you muchly, Noodle of Einstein... It felt that way when writing it, and am glad to know it evo.. read more
  Fran Marie

4 Years Ago

not a problem..good to see you back..
Chase Dylan

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much
songs of wrongs. I know how the words go. thanks for the lovely piece.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Aye, thank you very much for appreciating
Nice structure and emotions with a strong voice inside your prose,
Forever is a long time...with those gills appearing at the right moment.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Right? Gills can make for a lasting time in little to no oxygen environments... Thank you, Josie
Josie E. Cook M. A.

6 Years Ago

Yes! :)
You're welcome.
This is so good. I wanted to read more my friend.
"I know she will not see this, i'm just a bleeding creature...
So whisper feels like forever
...Leave it"
The above lines. Strong, logical and perfect. You made the reader feel the thoughts and the emotions. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

You are most welcome, Coyote, but thank you even more for appreciating it...
Coyote Poetry

6 Years Ago

I did like and you are welcome my friend.
"when your clever weather was stormy
I grew gills and stormed on... "
Freakin' genius.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Not as genius as your face...! Hah, thank you, Carol
So touching. 'Leaving' is one of my most unwanted words. But sometimes things happen and people need to move on.
I love the style of writing. Great!


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Agreed, and absolutely true, thank you so much for reading
I'm more of a straightforward reader & writer, so I'm not catching your every idea here . . . still, I very much love an uninhibited write like this that throws ideas together in original ways, with original expressions, etc. Your title line is a feeling I get often, so it's relatable. There's a hint of rhyming, but not in a structured way, & this contributes to the word play . . . feels like you're having as much fun with the way words SOUND, as much as what the meaning conveys.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I am all for the "both sides of the coin style reviewing"... Which is what you seem to be best at, B.. read more
barleygirl

6 Years Ago

I never even thought about word sounds being a big part of writing until I started on this website 1.. read more
'.. in the rust of spaces left between us'
Cunning 😁
Metaphors galore! You are amazing with them.. 👍
Loved your writeup as always 😊

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thanks very much, Krutika... It is satisfying to hear such praise from a noteworthy poetess...
Vivid descriptions and stellar metaphors. Your talent shines in every well written line. However, what I enjoy most is your unique style. Amazing writing my friend. :) Julie

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Oh wow, Jewel... Your talent for beautiful articulation is apparent in how you review... Thanks so m.. read more

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Chase Dylan

Denver, CO



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