Understanding usually requires accepted meaning or reference points that are easily communicated. There seems to be more attention here to rhyme than meaning and much of it seems contrived and meaningless without clearly communicating an expression that is not dedicated to the sound of the words. I have never been a fan of rhyme simply for rhyme's sake but believe poetry should express an elevation in communication of common or exceptional values. I had rather the message be clearly communicated without rhyme than with rhyme and without clarity or meaning. These are my thoughts and opinions on the piece but do not reflect the opinions or thoughts of the majority of reviewers here. It is clearly a matter of taste in art. But don't be discouraged. My artistic tastes revolt at that which many renowned critics consider masterpieces.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. Thank you, as well... F.. read moreThanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. Thank you, as well... For the real criticism...You are not alone in thinking "understanding" needs defined lines of expressionism... Without clear-cut meaning... Who knows... However, I like to think I have come across a happy medium since my time of writing this... Between meaning and abstract...
Understanding usually requires accepted meaning or reference points that are easily communicated. There seems to be more attention here to rhyme than meaning and much of it seems contrived and meaningless without clearly communicating an expression that is not dedicated to the sound of the words. I have never been a fan of rhyme simply for rhyme's sake but believe poetry should express an elevation in communication of common or exceptional values. I had rather the message be clearly communicated without rhyme than with rhyme and without clarity or meaning. These are my thoughts and opinions on the piece but do not reflect the opinions or thoughts of the majority of reviewers here. It is clearly a matter of taste in art. But don't be discouraged. My artistic tastes revolt at that which many renowned critics consider masterpieces.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. Thank you, as well... F.. read moreThanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. Thank you, as well... For the real criticism...You are not alone in thinking "understanding" needs defined lines of expressionism... Without clear-cut meaning... Who knows... However, I like to think I have come across a happy medium since my time of writing this... Between meaning and abstract...
Reminded me of Andronicus with Understanding, laughing and crying.
At the end of the day nobody understands perfectly as well as well do deep down.
Another great write from you.
Thanks for sharing
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, Poet face, I read the poem you mentioned... Was good stuff
I like how it started as smooth and soft and ended hard and dark. You talk about relationships in life and in people a good transcending way in a whole new spectrum of joy and darkness as well as hard upfront. Do continue to bridge a gap through your poetry.
It seems that You understand all whom are around You but no one around You do the same for You, or at least pay attention to what You say or do, like they only take advantages from You without caring about what You want, it left You to be hurt and angry, feeling betrayed, and yes You hate betrayal.
Sometime You wish You can stop growing inside and keep Your being just "understanding", at some time You need to stop so others can catch up to You and You won't feel lonely again.
I hope I'm mistaken here, but this is what I got from Your words here.
You have RIDICULOUSLY on-point insight, I swear... Your words mean much, again, and thank you so muc.. read moreYou have RIDICULOUSLY on-point insight, I swear... Your words mean much, again, and thank you so much, Light... I suppose we need to wait for others, sometimes... Growth does not happen at the same pace across all...
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6 Years Ago
I will try and use this ridiculously on-point insight into useful things the best I can :)
I liked this poem my friend.
"Molesting creatures...
Electing reavers...
So quiver and see this
hear wit betrayed
leap of faith
marmalade-aid and sated breath today...
Baked blaze and graze..."
The above lines. Outstanding. I had to read the poem again. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
You are most welcome, Coyote, but more thank you's to you, for reading and enjoying
I know that every time i stop by i'm in for a treat! And oh man, this is just something else, marmalaid - aid, a seed for the thousands of leeches infecting peaches....quite breathtaking dear author. :)
Thanks so much, dear reader, and...
Oh wait...
It is the person who's poetry showed .. read moreThanks so much, dear reader, and...
Oh wait...
It is the person who's poetry showed me Abel Korzeniowski...!
You are amazing, man, and have an even more amazing music taste... Ik I say that every time, but it is a fact that can not be accentuated enough, haha...
I expect a bad a*s song next time I visit...
Thanks again
6 Years Ago
haha, you're too generous :) Thank you and btw, i'm almost becoming a fan of your work. Amazing stuf.. read morehaha, you're too generous :) Thank you and btw, i'm almost becoming a fan of your work. Amazing stuff :)
6 Years Ago
Haha... "Almost"? I will take it, thanks again, Ana