"Understanding"

"Understanding"

A Poem by Chase Dylan
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Laughing... Crying...

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Was I ever anything other than a row boat of understanding...
Was the load a toad that couldn't carry the weight of our laughing...
Might as well be cashed-out and standing in the rain
cause you feel no pain when trading me in for gains...
I'm alone and in vain I seek growth with a cane and rope
hope my choke can be caught before it hits the moat...
Rote slop of gropes in the dark
where was I when the mark missed its lark...
I'm hearkened to flop...
So start to stab me every which-way...
I'm heading for memory lane and it's a lame avenue of grain-free
now free but am a seed for the thousands of leeches infecting peaches... 
Molesting creatures...
Electing reavers...
So quiver and see this
hear wit betrayed
leap of faith
marmalade-aid and sated breath today...
Baked blaze and graze...
Now red-in-the-face I take a taste of fae-waste
 that pale-place when aced of graceless lace I hasten traces of pages placed... 
Intent I create craters in a maze of traitors
that bladed saber hater...
I hate her,
and savor another suitor forever suited for her labors   
Later, Gator...

© 2017 Chase Dylan


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Understanding usually requires accepted meaning or reference points that are easily communicated. There seems to be more attention here to rhyme than meaning and much of it seems contrived and meaningless without clearly communicating an expression that is not dedicated to the sound of the words. I have never been a fan of rhyme simply for rhyme's sake but believe poetry should express an elevation in communication of common or exceptional values. I had rather the message be clearly communicated without rhyme than with rhyme and without clarity or meaning. These are my thoughts and opinions on the piece but do not reflect the opinions or thoughts of the majority of reviewers here. It is clearly a matter of taste in art. But don't be discouraged. My artistic tastes revolt at that which many renowned critics consider masterpieces.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

4 Years Ago

Thanks so much! Sorry it has taken a minute to reply! Been away for a while. Thank you, as well... F.. read more



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Since I'm a rhyme-aholic myself, always enjoyable to read one of your "rap" sounding pieces. This one seems to be more rhymy than usual, tho, & in one place it even got to be a bit distracting from the meaning: "Rote . . . and I think you might mean "slope" (instead of slop?) . . . " & for the next few lines, the rhyming was a little distracting. But overall, well done & full of playful imagery for the senses.

Your writing style is very original & that's one of the best things to be as a writer.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I usually am quite firm on readers taking what they will from things, yet you ask so nicely, so... .. read more
barleygirl

6 Years Ago

I thought "slope" only becuz of the sound, not the meaning . . . thanks for explaining!
Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Hmm, yeah it was the original word that popped into my head, can not lie... But I may SLIGHTLY exagg.. read more
Once again, your method of wording is superb :) Brilliant...the imagery is outstanding...I particularly like "leap of faith, marmalade-aid and sated breath today." though the first line really has such impact also, I always enjoy reading your poetry :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you so much, Poppy, I have always loved your style, and am blessed to have such appreciation s.. read more
"I hate her,
and savor another suitor forever suited for her labors
Later, Gator..."

This actually sums up the entire piece, if I'm understanding it right. You have the gift of "poetic" gab, Silente. Why aren't you famous?

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

You DID get it right, spot-on, actually...
I... I do not know... It is not something I seek... read more
Another fast paced, creative and engaging piece of writing, filled with events and emotions to keep the reader engaged!
Well done Silente, keep it up!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I do so love my intermingled emotion and events... It does indeed keep people engaged... I hope... T.. read more
Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

No problem Silente! :)
Your are truly talented once you have a pen and a paper in front of you, or keyboard when it comes to this site lol

Well wrote Silente, this write is just beyond amazement.
Thanks for sharing, always happy to read your words. :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Haha... I can not write without typing to be honest... So def' a keyboard... Thank you, Joey... Mean.. read more
Joey Nizz

6 Years Ago

You are most welcome buddy! and thank you for your comment! :p
I would call it hard hitting catharsis of a tortured soul. It is a very strong poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

You would call it right, Avinash... Thanks for the appreciation, it is appreciated...
A gifted personality...I liked each and every line here.....I loved it...:)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

A gifted insight, Surya, thank you...
beautifully penned....so much of meaning there was in this lovely poem..keep writing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

I shall try... Thank you very much...
Such a graceful energy flows from your pen my friend. It was a pleasure reading another masterpiece from you...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Mr. E... Is an honor, and hopefully I can continue...
You really have a unique way of expression which is very refreshing to read. A maze of pain and betrayal weaving it's way to the grand finale! Great write!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

You nailed it to the brittle bone, Hebe... A maze of pain and betrayal it is... Thanks so much...

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Chase Dylan

Denver, CO



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