Sacred Vapors

Sacred Vapors

A Poem by Chase Dylan
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Submarine-stage...

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I'm untamed
Insane brain lame-reined in to fillet saber-lain drains
In labor I gain ravens braver than slavers able to savor gall-breaker takers
if you're in favor lets rape-her and traverse papers for diverse capers
I'm tapered
a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage
a rage in a cage set like a face-plant
I'm like Abraham and freed the slaves of verbal-trends
I'm global-sent and vorpal-bent
but low-rent keeps me lent to the lamb
I'm slammed and lambasted
ran outta RAM by a ram slipperier than grand
By ghosts boasted most toast by the roastiest roach
I puff a roach 
roast a goat
loads of moats rowed alone
Host is over-grown
sober toned loans and blown-out foam
roam ah-doam and sloped groans
I'm holier than the boast of those ghost hosts
No tone

© 2017 Chase Dylan


Author's Note

Chase Dylan
Umm... Stuff...

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You're back in the groove, my friend! My favourite lines in this one are:
"a subversive undertaker of faker law-makers
on sacred vapors I'm a shaker of all traitors
Belays raided faded duration sated gated by lesions on nations
Fulmination of generations slated in gray
Painted on a submarine stage".
Keep 'em coming!


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Horseman, it is much appreciated
The Iron Horseman

6 Years Ago

You're welcome, Silente.



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This is so lively and fast paced that I have to actively slow myself down whilst reading. Great as always

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Do not go too slow... Heh, thank you, Alex
Well the stuff, to be precise your poem is a total tongue twister!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Heh, thank you, Anj
Anjali

6 Years Ago

You are welcome 😀
This read like a rap song and cleverly written as always.

Posted 6 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Andrew
I like the rhyming and flow of this. Keep writing!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thanks, I will try, Simple!
This stuff is amazing! As always, well.. But I really loved it. Especially the first three lines. They're wonderful.

Love,
Vasilees.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Vas
Wowzers....!! Your poetry can become a race car Silente :P
It's fast paced, engaging and has lots of effort!
Plus, you have super good vocab
Well done, keep it up :)


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thanks, Mr. Writer
Mr.Writer

6 Years Ago

No problem Silente :)
whew ..try reading that in one breath! :) ..tons of sharp phrases and lines ..was able to take a short breath here:
"a rage in a cage set like a face-plant" i imagined myself in the cage and so paused automatically .. and through the whole read (out loud) i saw the poet in the dimmed, subterranean, smoke filled, "place" ... where the beats expounded and pounded and grounded ... themselves in bongo beats ;) nice read .. lots to chew on
E.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

... Now that is what I see, haha... This poem was actually a snippet from a verse... So you would be.. read more
My favorite line, " I'm tapered
a subversive undertaker of fake law-makers." !!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

A good line, thank you
nice work like always before. keep writing.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Chase Dylan

6 Years Ago

Thank you, Abraham

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Added on August 5, 2017
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Chase Dylan
Chase Dylan

Denver, CO



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