Heavens (No)Know

An avoided beat...

Heaven knows I'v avoided this beat as many sounds as scrapes have cries

I swear I haven't written in "X" amount of days

 Need to refrain from using disdainful lettering words shouted out in sterling-press for magnets crash

clashing bricks made Bundy with a swish made Lincoln huddled over in his own piss after freeing the slaves from workin' in they own piss...

 In the pits of slavery I begin to begin again

upon the flap of a starlets wings I carry harp and twine to where it sits

to where it sits nestled within the bounds of Todd and Emily got cozy on a cape in forest-land

 but not eighteen yet now Todd getting the late-applause from Emily's break-up poem she wrote in her garage before she hung herself over a loved-dog got run over in front of her yard

Damn...

Now he's scraping tar for giving a girl his heart before she was truly ready to be an adult

I'm face-down I cant even find the myth of ah-far I scan mountaintops but see villages-devoured

her lonely-soul coiled a tidy nest of vipers chillin' in quiet

I embrace violence my cuts do mean harm but only to myself do I mean the greatest harm of all

Stopping my paws from writing another slog of a free-thinking verse against my clauses

Claustrophobic I stroke upon it...

Godless gauze checkered so the mummy is playing checkers with his body in full-wrap

the DVD barely fits in my USB port the sealing of feelings-in can barely handle a re-start of support

I mimic self-help routines but find rosy-colored varsity on my hob-knob in the morning 

call me quitter call me a cameo too short for him but I'm six foot one when I stand upon straw-tents

The headers create maws of angry headlines to hold-me to my within...

De-railed sunshine finds me but folded-globally my tin-puffin-gone gonna cost a lot more than puff amid the drowned

Reviews

[Chris]

It's Saturday, I'm old, got tea instead of coffee 'cause its ONE HOT AFTERNOON ...caps intended. I followed the musings - beatless rhythm not withstanding. No good deed goes unpunished - get that. Kids think the alternative to life is ok - least for them ...you gotta live a bit to learn better about alternatives. Seems you're having a writer's 'cramp' ...happens to us all... perhaps if you stop worrying about finding something to write about you'll FIND something to write about - maybe?

[Chase Dylan]

It is for sure hotter than it should be... Are you sure you are not in my head...? I have struggled with direction for a while now... Almost like searching the sky all day for white clouds, only to blink awake and see a moon...
I thought I was writing about the sun...
Thanks for this, it was actually helpful...
Not to say all reviews from everyone are not inherently helpful...
Some more than others, though, eh...
I will keep at it, Chris...
Now I need coffee...

[Chris]

Now THIS COMMENT down to "...sun..." is standalone and a gem - not teasing. Sometimes when we DON'T try so hard and just be us as we are ...is empowering AND pausing.

now I need some coffee too...

[Chase Dylan]

I thought you might like it...
I also figured you would say that...
Be abstract, people tell you to be direct...
Be direct, people tell you to be abstract...
It never ends.
Empowering it might be to be me, but tiring it is to always chase down what it means to be me and express it with intent...

More coffee...?

Yes

[Chris]

Sweet... I think you got it!
and yes to that coffee.

[Chase Dylan]

That is the problem my old friendo, Chris-o...
I always seem to get it...
But either lack the willpower...
Or am just plain too lazy/stupid to care...
Or I justify till my path is the right one...
All bad things...

[Robert Trakofler]

slap smack clap tracks can cause bad reacts but poems can never hurt you... oops i mean stick and stones may break your bones holy crap... never mind, screw that s**t who came up with that saying anyhow? This happens to me too but mostly words seem to pour out of my pores sometimes they are poor but later on I will restore... I have starts laying about strewn upon my desk and by my bed for days like that! some i glance and just want to vomit others strike me fancy and i roll but I think the key is to just roll every day even if its just two words and a coffee drip its the continuous flow that trickles the nuggets into your pan.

[Chase Dylan]

Made the mistake of trying to read this while listening to Kendrick Lamar...
I think you have it...
In that...
Wtf...?
Haha...
Beauty of a ditty, friend

[Chase Dylan]

Oh, and thank you and all that happy jazz

[Robert Trakofler]

he he I am hearing a bit of "humble" in my ramble

[Chase Dylan]

Keep that s**t on a high note.... SYRUP SANDWICHES

[gram linski]

Loved the rambling free style, the language bounces along at a good speed, dragging the reader with it,reminds me of some drunken Kerouac blues,

[Chase Dylan]

I, of course... Googled "Kerouac blues" before I even responded to this, haha...
Loving it...
Love when I get good references in reviews...
Thanks much, mate...
This stuff on Youtube making my day...

[Chase Dylan]

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1-if3tkmZvM

[Sami Khalil]

A poem of abstract but powerful message which is food for thought and charge for survival. Life can send blows our way in may forms. Health loss, wasteful wealth , breakups, drowning, harm and so forth. I feel the writer has experienced a lot of those blows but come back standing strong even six feet. Everything has costs and value in the great scheme of things. Some learn the hard way, others who got it easy, loose all of that. Heaven knows where we stand and where are we going. Your style is unique and marvelous...

[Chase Dylan]

Ex-f*****g-actly...
Bang-up on the thoughts, and even banger-upper-job on catching my fav. lines...
Tis not so much a flow landscape, I mean IT IS, I always rhyme... BUT...

Tis more of an exercise in WHAT I can say, and not caring WHO thinks what of it...
No more am I reaching for "success" based on others...
I am here to learn and express in a way that I deem positive to ME...

I have done the horse and pony show, more than most have...

Tis not a fun show...
Just canter off and eat some grass...

You will be happier, lolol

[Chase Dylan]

I tried to give complete answers as well, to your reviews... Since you were so generous with your time, my friend
Transparency is key to being

[Sami Khalil]

:).............

[Sami Khalil]

"The headers create maws of angry headlines to hold-me to my within...
De-railed sunshine finds me but folded-globally"

[Chase Dylan]

Ahhh... Yes....
Reviews, critiques, words... People... Agencies of being outside your own soul...
What really matters...

The opinion of Joe in his basement, about your AbAbAb meter being a syllable off, and not to his liking...

Or...

YOU...

When trying to sleep at night...

I think sleeping is most important, but it is surprisingly difficult to remember that at times...

[Sami Khalil]

:}...............

[Sami Khalil]

"Godless gauze checkered so the mummy is playing checkers with his body in full-wrap"

[Chase Dylan]

That is just a dynamite line...

[Sami Khalil]

"my cuts do mean harm but only to myself do I mean the greatest harm of all
Stopping my paws from writing another slog of a free-thinking verse"

[Chase Dylan]

I have self-harmed quite a lot in my life, not something I hide... As I can physically not...
Not had the easiest run of things, faced disease, prison...
Homelessness...
No family...
No friends, really...
Hunger...
Constant pain..
Addiction...
Much more...
But not nearly as much as some...
Choice is what we have, ultimately...

You have yourself, and that can be the greatest gift, or curse there ever was...
Loving yourself enough to keep going...
That is the greatest good you can do, and the greatest harm comes from not letting yourself BE...

[Sami Khalil]

"giving a girl his heart before she was truly ready to be an adult
I'm face-down I cant even find the myth of ah-far I scan mountaintops"

[Chase Dylan]

The way I write...
Put on beat or instrumental
Pick 1-2 words
Forward/reverse engineer those words for as long as i feel like it
Edit if going to post it(usually dont)

All my writes are usually a page of just words
Never more than 5-10 minutes to write, and I only post a smidge of it...

I was GOING to let this freestyle get cut off at "adult"
But decided I would include the rest of the poem, despite knowing it would turn people off to reading it all, or reviewing...
It just felt good to put in my personal feelings... Even if they are abstract

[Sami Khalil]

All good. All understandable.