?

Please tell me something

Anything to keep me here

My heart is cold

From the hurting

My ears are bleeding from the lies

My eyes are burning

The sun is shining

Can’t hold back my fear.

Reviews

[JeremyTims]

I love it its a wonderful and easy to understand. The message and so happy in it but i know for a fact that something gonna happen soon to make you happy once more.

[Crossxxx]

Interesting poem, though I'm not a fan of poetry, I 1ike it.

[MsMermaid]

I just wonder if the poor girl in your poem is neurotically needy if she wants to hear him say something that will make her stay after he has lied to her so much it makes her ears bleed. Other than portraying dysfunction it is a fine piece of poetry.

[Harmonica winds]

Intriguing piece, like it

[Your Perfect Disaster]

U did a good job.
I iked it, but maybe some personification or another literary device might help to expand on how you feel and give a sense of closure to the poem.

~nicely done though.
And.... is sumtin buggin u?

[BlueDreams]

Sweet and short write :-)

[Sevendayspast]

Simple and from the heart! :)

[TheKaylaPup]

I like it, though I think that you could make it better. Try expanding on how you feel, and why you feel that way. Also, I would suggest you consult a thesaurus, some of your words are indeed over used. Perhaps try "Icy" instead of cold, or "Brilliant" instead of shinning, just as suggestions, I would check out a thesaurus for myself if I were you.

[johnnyqueer]

I've felt like this before. Great write.