Broken

Broken

A Poem by Skoo.

When I was a child I was so alone
I lived in a house but couldn't call it a home
I dreamed of a toy
Who would love me too
Not just sit silently
As the other toys would do
I dreamed he'd have intelligent green eyes
I dreamed he'd be loyal and never tell lies

And then one day, when I came home from school
He was dancing on my bed, something other toys
Wouldn't do

I loved the toy, loved him so
Took him everywhere I'd go
Tried to take care of him, tried and tried, 
But it just didn't work, He'd get upset,
He'd get mad at me, 
And try to knock me down

One day I dropped him down the stairs
An accident, I swear
But when I looked I could not see him
Anywhere, anywhere

I looked all around the house and then I searched the street
I looked through the town and in the woods where all the toys would meet
I looked through the country and then I looked all around the world
But no one seemed to know him, no one there had heard

I looked all day and looked all night
My face awash with tears of fright
And sadness, because then I knew
That for once and all I had lost you

I went home on found him there, sitting on the bed
I apologised over and over but he simply shook his head
And said "Let this be a lesson
A lesson that needs be learned
You didn't treat this toy right 
But soon it will be another poor souls turn"
And then he walked out of the door
And I had to let him go 
Since he was correct, after all
And so and so and so and so
I stayed there lost for words, 
I laid down in my pain
Suffocating on the knowledge that
I'd never see him again. 

© 2011 Skoo.


Author's Note

Skoo.
Another song, I thought I may as well upload it.
The reason the song doesn't really flow is that the song's designed to a be acapella.
Thankyou for reading it (: ♥

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I love a capella songs. They have the potential to be so beautiful, just a human voice and nothing else.

I love the message of this, told with such a childish and simplistic background. Anyone could relate to this, and that toy could really be anything or anyone a person takes for granted. And I also like that the toy was never described, leaving the reader to create an image in their minds that means something to them.

This is probably my favorite poem/song from you (I don't know how it sounds as a song, but it really works as a poem, even with some of the disconnect between phrases, which I think really captured the childish emotions and emphasized important points and lines). And I really like the kind of ambiguous title. We are never really told whether it refers to the speaker or to the toy, which really adds meaning to both the title and the piece as a whole.

Great write. Going in my favorites.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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This was pretty awesome! This would be a great a cappella song.

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is amazing. I love it!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is EXTREMELY unique and interesting! I just loved it! It was gloomy, like reading an Edgar Allan Poe poem. Kudos!! :-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


very well written..truly touches where it should.. a very good read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is amazing. made me cry for some reason. i love how you rhymed the words, it just made the poem flow so much better. my favorite line was:
"I looked all around the house and then I searched the street
I looked through the town and in the woods where all the toys would meet
I looked through the country and then I looked all around the world
But no one seemed to know him, no one there had heard"
you are a great, talented poet/lyricist. i could really relate to this poem. keep writing :) 100/100

Posted 13 Years Ago


I wanted a toy, and I got a friend..Rather have had the toy.
love this!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I love a capella songs. They have the potential to be so beautiful, just a human voice and nothing else.

I love the message of this, told with such a childish and simplistic background. Anyone could relate to this, and that toy could really be anything or anyone a person takes for granted. And I also like that the toy was never described, leaving the reader to create an image in their minds that means something to them.

This is probably my favorite poem/song from you (I don't know how it sounds as a song, but it really works as a poem, even with some of the disconnect between phrases, which I think really captured the childish emotions and emphasized important points and lines). And I really like the kind of ambiguous title. We are never really told whether it refers to the speaker or to the toy, which really adds meaning to both the title and the piece as a whole.

Great write. Going in my favorites.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful!

Posted 13 Years Ago


I was like this as a pre teen. The house I was in wasn't a home. You told the story well.

Posted 13 Years Ago


A great poem and a great song.. I think it flows very well ..I love the theme of the toy, which could represent even friends in our lives that we mistreat and they move on. Beautifully written Scoobs.

Posted 13 Years Ago



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