Paranoia

Who is it? OR what is it?

Everywhere I go

 

Everywhere I see

 

I find YOU staring

 

             Staring

         back at me

 

with those eyes 

so 

vividly.

Author's Note

Critic. Suggest. Share your mind :)

Reviews

[MomzillaNC]

Something or someone you just can’t get off your mind… you’ll always see reminders everywhere. I like the way you presented this. It could be about love or obsession or distraction or even fear.

[Sindu]

Thank you Momzi. Amazing how much the perspective can change the way we can see it.. you are right.

[MomzillaNC]

YVW :D

[Avinash]

Some eyes catch your attention so strongly you can do nothing but carry those looks wherever you go.

[Sindu]

yes! Like a slimy bug..

[SuspectGray]

Presented like a ransom note cut from multiple sources and pasted into this tight verse....adding to the paranoia. Enjoyed ( : O )

[Sindu]

That fits here incredibly :D I was imagining it in a market place at evening where the person feels eyes piercing amidst hundreds of them. Guess what you said was a follow up of it. Thanks a lot for enjoying it!

[613]

I enjoyed reading this due to the awesome font you chose, along with the way you displayed your work on the page. It was very short. I honestly would have liked to read more! Keep it up!

- Brittney

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Brittney! It's great you like this, better than earlier.
It was what I wanted it to be when I wrote it. After letting it stew In my book, during publishing it I felt it wasn't enough either. If I work on it I will surely let you know for your review. Thanks again.

[Mayank]

ma'am would you mind returning my eyeballs??? pattern here is superb and the choices of words gave them ping pong effect.

[Sindu]

Just find your way to the window sill where they lie in display to stare and weird out the passerbys :D
Thank you for enjoying this!

[Mayank]

Again you have gotta hold my hands and take me to window sill... you won't be able to bear my fall :p

[R Smith]

stare straight back and walk on, its not my grey ghost by the way, he's on holiday in Spain :) intriguing write Sindu, certainly gets the hairs rising on the back of the neck :)

[Sindu]

Thanks Richard for the tip! Phew.. One thing of my list. :D
Thank you :)

[andrew mitchell]

A fantastic grabbing write ! ok you can unchain me now!! from your brilliant write!!:)

[Sindu]

Okkk.. *lets you go* as long as you can find your way back :)
Thanks a lot Andrew for such a fun review!

[micky]

Short and sweet ....was made.for this poem..
I enjoyed the flow and its catchie
Well done

[Sindu]

Thanks a lot Micky :)

[Saddam]

I think you must hit back with a punch.
Hahaha..... just true.
Thanks for sharing and I am telling you I am not like that.

[Sindu]

I like that idea, saddam. I will keep it in mind and meanwhile may be practice :P
Thank you :)

[Saddam]

haha.... welcome dear...

[bunny]

That's the problem.... Lost in solutions ... But the best part is women are getting bold enough to stand up for themselves. Keep it up

[Sindu]

Yes, things are headed for good change hopefully. Thank you.