How Bad is Bad?

How Bad is Bad?

She said to let her go in alone.

I replied, "Let’s go in alone together."

Two lonely natives, city lives, and living wild; though, raised to love...

We intermingled with others, while searching for a better name.

Atticus, she's dragging the lake.

She loves the pain, she is beyond dangerous, she’s insane!

She will never make it to the morning because at night she always forgets my name.

She's murder, robbing me of my thoughts and well being.

The echoes of her darkest words ever said bleed through my veins.

Mental tattoos, far from being forgotten.

The pain is refreshed as my heart is rotting.

Soon I’ll be heartless, the question that remains is will she take my soul?

Who is she?

She is me!

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Seems more like the inner demon we hold inside us which takes over us only too often...

"Two lonely natives, city lives, and living wild; though, raised to love..."
This line attracted me the most. Also "let's go in alone together" was a good one.
Interesting twist at the end.. I enjoyed reading this.

[sinNsincerity]

Indeed and I have written about my inner demon in other poems as well.
I'm glad you like those lines Yumma!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're welcome, sNs! A pleasure reading this :))

[Sarah Hampton]

I really enjoyed how you mixed vivid imagery with mystique. Half way through I had approximately 3 scenarios in my head, yet none of them being the twist at the end. Also, 'Let's go in alone together' truly spoke to me on a personal level.

[sinNsincerity]

Hehe, that's pretty neat. I'm glad that you were able to make a connection.
That's all I ever wanted to do.
Thank you for reading Sarah.

[wordman]

well it seems you have poured out your heart in this write sin,great job

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Sir!

[wordman]

you are welcome

[Brittany Zedalis]

"Mental tattoos, far from being forgotten." I absolutely love love love that line. I love the whole poem, but especially that line. Nice work.

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that you loved it. Thank you fore reading Luna.

[AaronFreitas]

That is an awesome write my friend! Truly creative piece... good work!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Aaron

[~]

I would say it is definitely BAD - a perplexed write. You have just let your story unravel and did not hold back. all the emotions are received loud and clear.

[sinNsincerity]

It really was at one point in my life, but we make corrections, so that we can move forward.

[Elisa]

WOW this poem really made me stop and think. It's one of those pieces that you don't really know what to say about it, but you know it made a huge impact. It takes a lot of talent to write a piece like that. You've left me speechless!

[sinNsincerity]

That's really great! Thank you Elisa.

[Ruth]

"I replied, "Let’s go in alone together." "....now that's a belter of a line there...love that :) Conflicting energy and damn cool visuals...excellent! :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for reading Ruth, I'm glad you enjoyed it..KFC

[Isabel25]

Yin and yang battling inside you. You could even be the metaphor for the world, where good and evil constantly go hand in hand, balancing each other.

"The echoes of her darkest words ever said bleed through my veins."- I loved this line the best.

Yet another brilliant piece Sin :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much Annie. That is one of my fav. lines s well that I have come up with.
It is a constant battle and everyday I just try to better than I was yesterday.

[Isabel25]

You certainly are getting better with each day as far as poetry is concerned anyway :D

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you!

[TheOne&Only]

Two people so alike finding comfort and peace in one another. Depending on each other to remain "Good"...Yin-to my Yang...Yang to my Yin...is what this poem makes me feel like. It makes you question is it possible that two "bad" people make ' Good'....?!?..I think it's possible. :) but then again I'm just a hopeful soul

[sinNsincerity]

I'm hopeful also and I believe it possible. Not to change one another, but to be there and wanting nothing but happiness for one another.
Thank you for reading hon!
Always appreciated.

[Carla Mei]

This is a very interesting poem 0.0 I think it is a perfect example of twisted emotions that swirl up inside each human being... nicely done :) Can I ask you though, what made you write this poem?

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Carla. Well I grew up catholic and was always conservative and conscious with my thinking and action. So this is just showing how I felt when I let all that go...

[Carla Mei]

:) that's actually quite inspiring, nice one ^_^

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Carla