Eardrum

Hubba hubba.

Hubble eyes...

All I see is star light

When I tap into

my third mind.

Lub- lub!

My love?

Can you hear?

It’s my heart’s love

banging on

your eardrum.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

WOW! What a load of intriguing imagination here! I can't believe this. I love it when someone surprises me with a novel approach to writing love poems (so many love poems are so similar!) Excellent use of onomatopoeia to SHOW instead of tell, based on SOUND, which goes with your theme so perfectly (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you Margie, that's magic. I'm always thinking of new ways to write to stand out from the rest. Love is Love.

[JayceeC]

Hubble eyes is a great, unique expression for one who sees much more. The alliteration gives it a pleasant sound and an overall feeling of happiness.

[sinNsincerity]

Yea pretty much! =D Thank you for reading Jan!

[....................]

Creative and beautiful words to extend to one a deepest love...love it!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it Ledrew.

[KWP]

clever ... now can you go bang bang somewhere else I am a tryin' to sleep ....

hehehe - of course I love this - how can one not :) XXX

[sinNsincerity]

You are so funny! =D
Thank you so much for reading, I'm so glad you love it.

[guy drori]

It reminds me of another poem i don't quite remember, but this is a good write- with a great beat

[sinNsincerity]

Thanks for reading and thinking so Sir Guy!

[AaronFreitas]

Nice work buddy! Love the creativity :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Aaron, I really appreciate it.

[wordman]

and who would have thought of this,only david
but i like it

[sinNsincerity]

hahaha =D
I love it!
Thank you my kind friend!
It's always a pleasure!

[wordman]

you are creative

[sinNsincerity]

Oh shuxxx!