Blessed Sacred

Viewed as shameless to most,

But that's based off your fragile prospective.

I'm Sacred.

Unguarded, unshielded, unloved.

Defenseless,

So I don't feel s**t.

But you feel me, because,

You haven't Felt like yourself inawhile.

Unleash me,

So you can finally just be you.

Now touch yourself-

Zoetry masturbation.

That's all you have because

You can't have me.

But I want it with y'all!

All I need is time...

Doom!

Reviews

[S A Grant]

This is very well written, at first it doesn't seem to make much sense... however the more times you go over it you start to put little pieces together as if you are stripping away layers to get to the true meaning and then it hits you...

Wonderful Read

[sinNsincerity]

Yes, many layers indeed. Thank you so much for spending the time to read and for leaving me your thought, I really do appreciate it.

[Celie Rose]

Strong and emotional write.
"Unguarded, unshielded, unloved.
Defenseless,
So I don't feel s**t."
I can relate.
Well written and expressed.

[sinNsincerity]

That's pretty awesome!

[Raylene]

Very sexual yet captivating my dear writer great work

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you!

[Raylene]

Anytime :)

[GalaxyGhost]

9th line, just a question if it's an error but one of the word is capitalized in the middle of the sentence so I don't know if that was intentional or not.

[sinNsincerity]

Very intentional.

[GalaxyGhost]

Okay, makespecially sense. Thanks for clarifying.

[Davidgeo]

2nd line; change "your" to "our" or "a".... Just a flippant remark to pretend I am relevant to your structure. An ignotable comment from me.

There are minor errors here and there, like "inahwile", come on... you didn't mean to do that. You do yourself a disservice with s**t like that. It's really the only glaring error though.

On less dickish note... you made a solid poem with ideas that don't make me want to vomit. I'm quite glad to have read you; "it brought (a little) color to my cheeks" Goat Mountains. Everybody is always saying "keep writing" these days.... you should keep writing - but fug those other aspholes right in the ear. (most people should just shib the fug up...). Go forth uninfluenced if you can.... only if you can; it's all that matters.

[sinNsincerity]

I wouldn't put "our" because I'm not fragile, and not "a" because it won't hit those who are...
read moreI wouldn't put "our" because I'm not fragile, and not "a" because it won't hit those who are...
And I purposely wrote inawhile in such a way because language is composed by phrases and not like a robot. Just something I use ever so often. Early writing did not space phrases because they knew this is how the mind thinks. Like inlove, comeon, yourself. So I don't believe it'll be a disservice to anyone but God really...

[Stan Lee]

My favorite part was
"But you feel me, because,
You haven't Felt like yourself in a while."
:) nice poem

[sinNsincerity]

I was hoping that would stick out. Thank you so much for spending the time to read!

[Stan Lee]

You're welcome. I always read your poems. :)

[wordman]

you laid your feelings out nicely

[sinNsincerity]

There's just so much to say

[AmandaFuller]

Very well. I love the third, fourth, and fifth line.

[sinNsincerity]

Nice taste! Thank you Amanda.

[AmandaFuller]

No problem

[Nessly]

I like this.

Thanks for sharing!

[sinNsincerity]

No, Thank you!