God in the Ninth Inning

God in the Ninth Inning

A Poem by sinNsincerity

Women think deep!

Who do you think taught me?

Who do you think inspired this poetry?

Who do you think?

Quite insistent.

Smell the incense?

White [email protected]!

But deeper I go;

Quite subliminal...

Because lately,

Mrs. 7even-6ix  has forgotten about me.

She was digging me...

The horned mermaid left me at sea.

My Capricornuns Mistress.

Showing and taking it all in a blink.

3rd 3y3ed sacrifice.

Exposing me,

So I can view her compositions.

Feeling the feelings,

But the honesty of humanity

Has told me

F**K YOUR FEELINGS!

Quite insistent.

So I read in the lines-

In between my mind

In between my honesty

In between...

But please,

Please,

Get out of me.


© 2016 sinNsincerity


Author's Note

sinNsincerity
Abracadabara
I create as I speak



Battle-Star-Galactica Heart/Love,
Novela,
Gothspel-Poetry,
Done-with-Secular-Poerty,
Are-U-Still-Down,
Magik

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i definitely enjoyed this.

with the first line "women think deep!" i can interpret this two ways, which make the following parts have different meanings. it's either a plea for women to think deep or a statement that deep thinking is what women do. i'm not sure if you intended this as ambiguous but my first read-through was the interpretation that it's a plea for women to think deep about why you write poetry, and the answer is because of another woman. haha. i can, sadly, relate. haha.

i laughed pretty hard at the "F**K YOUR FEELINGS" part because i didn't expect to read that so boldly, but i definitely see the truth of how 'humanity' tells guys to interpret women's feelings. i like the word play in the next few lines about 'reading between.' i really like the creativity you got here. damn good!

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

Well personally, women are the closest thing to God, so I worship them as well... Every women I have.. read more



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I'm down with this! Awesome work!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

I'm glad to hear that you are. Thank you!
Interesting to say the least. it was a lot to absorb, but very unique.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

Why thank you, I do admit that my writing is something that should be dwelt on because of the though.. read more
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The lines that caught my eyes

" But the honesty of humanity
Has told me
F**K YOUR FEELINGS!"

oh well, that's just how the world goes ... Nice write.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

Very much so... haha
Im not trying to be harsh, but I really think this could've been better, take your time when you write about emotional stuff, that was okay, but it could have been great. It made me say, hmm... okay... again don't be upset, I just think you could do better if you practiced writing more. I couldn't feel the emotion in this.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

No harshness taken, but after I write anything, I think it could've been better, so I agree...
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Lovely poem!!
Keep on writing!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

Likewise Emily.
Exposing me,
So I can view her compositions." rich...... Always felt like exposed was the scariest word to exist. Being viewed, naked. Watched. Seen for everything you are, every physical trait, every emotional flaw. Terrifying. Terrifying to notice someone takes SUCH notice.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

It is scary, but I have learned that for me to take my writing and life itself to a whole other leve.. read more
i definitely enjoyed this.

with the first line "women think deep!" i can interpret this two ways, which make the following parts have different meanings. it's either a plea for women to think deep or a statement that deep thinking is what women do. i'm not sure if you intended this as ambiguous but my first read-through was the interpretation that it's a plea for women to think deep about why you write poetry, and the answer is because of another woman. haha. i can, sadly, relate. haha.

i laughed pretty hard at the "F**K YOUR FEELINGS" part because i didn't expect to read that so boldly, but i definitely see the truth of how 'humanity' tells guys to interpret women's feelings. i like the word play in the next few lines about 'reading between.' i really like the creativity you got here. damn good!

Posted 4 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

Well personally, women are the closest thing to God, so I worship them as well... Every women I have.. read more
You have a very unique way of writing. Interesting use of symbols and numbers. I get a sense of praise, sadness and then bitterness. It is well expressed and written.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

All jumbled into one space in time...
"So I read in the lines-
In between my mind
In between my honesty
In between..."

duuuude, i love this. It's been a challenge to find something good on here and like truly mean that. I've been reading some of your stuff and you're one of the good ones. nice

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

Why thanks Gabby! Yea, I think writing got stuck in missionary position and I'm trying to give read.. read more
A little beyond me - but then, Magick always is beyond my mind's comprehension. Dynamic for sure, just a little frustrating feeling so out of element and into someone else's language and references- you know, like you feel in the presence of an inside joke. But that's ok, still really interesting and unique, not like anything I've read- maybe a just a few generations too far removed . . . Thank you though for the challenge!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

4 Years Ago

Well, I don't believe in magik as the mainstream taboo it is...
More so in terms of love, pra.. read more

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