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Check it Out- Hear Me Out- Check Out

A Poem by sinNsincerity

The labyrinth of your heart painted  

Shadows I could no longer decipher.

Loving you was like having a leg cramp while I slept.

Please, no, wait a sec.

Ouch!

There was no way for me to interject,

So we hung in there just as a half torn ligament.

Let's tear it.

Do you fear it?

Scary.

Could you bare it if we called it quits?

But it's too late!

End of the ninth inning.

Ms. Brexit.

You reached it.

A new ending.

And I'm beyond having a fit.

Excellent doubt.

Hmm Hmm... Hmm Hmm...

© 2016 sinNsincerity


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It seems like every poem I read by you is even better than the last (if that's possible because they're already all kinds of awesome ;) This poem perfectly depicted the cycle of a relationship that we all have been through or will go through at one point or another in our life. Loved it :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

My pleasure Tashida, I'm glad you loved it.



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I apologize for taking so long to read this, I've been off this site for a long while; technical difficulties.
Anywho...I appreciate the descriptions in this piece as well as the... vaguely thoughtful and tentative air to the phrasing. I don't know if that was your intended tone. I too was in this sort of relationship, I feel like, last year. Very toxic, very unsure of how long it would last, painful all the while. I think I can appreciate it better since I re-read it and thought on it more.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Hmmm, nice metaphors and allusions to the cycle of life

great poem!

Posted 3 Years Ago


It seems like every poem I read by you is even better than the last (if that's possible because they're already all kinds of awesome ;) This poem perfectly depicted the cycle of a relationship that we all have been through or will go through at one point or another in our life. Loved it :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

2 Years Ago

My pleasure Tashida, I'm glad you loved it.
Hello sinNsincerity,

I like the cycle in which your poem moves. It follows the ups and downs of the emotional struggles we all go through at one time or another in our relationships. Nicely done!

Thank you for sharing!

Kind regards,

Schatzi



Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much Schatzi, it is my pleasure and I do my best to present what I want you all to see .. read more
It's like one story unfolding another, different scenes but yet so joinable. I love the mystery that its telling got me reading this over again.. Damn Keep it up :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you Annie, I'm so glad to hear that you enjoyed it!
I love the word play in this one! Great piece

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you Crystal.
Haha, hey Sin, quite an imagery you had versed in this piece. Some messages that is very well tucked in your very cool vocab. Always a pleasure to read my friend. EG.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank you man, I really appreciate that.
Nicely done. Something I'm sure we've all gone through. Great job

Posted 3 Years Ago


sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Thank for thinking so!
I like this. It very relatable because who hasn't had a leg cramp at some point. Sometimes we feel like its something we can get over, and sometimes those cramps have more sinister meanings. A simple cramp could mean a huge problem, and could eventually kill you, i.e. a blood clot. I think you captured that very well, and carried out even better with the idea of a torn ligament. Overall, I think this is a very interesting take on this! Nice job!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Especially when you're sleeping... God, that's the worst.
Thank you for reading, I'm really g.. read more
I dug this, brother.

It gave me the vibe of a nice spoken-word piece being performed on a stage somewhere -- pick your location. Really dug the collage-like nature of this in how you pulled from a few different places and examples, from leg cramps to baseball to Brexit.

Dope as always, my man.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sinNsincerity

3 Years Ago

Aye, that would be kool huh? I need to do an open reading one day.

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