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The labyrinth of your heart painted  

Shadows I could no longer decipher.

Loving you was like having a leg cramp while I slept.

Please, no, wait a sec.

Ouch!

There was no way for me to interject,

So we hung in there just as a half torn ligament.

Let's tear it.

Do you fear it?

Scary.

Could you bare it if we called it quits?

But it's too late!

End of the ninth inning.

Ms. Brexit.

You reached it.

A new ending.

And I'm beyond having a fit.

Excellent doubt.

Hmm Hmm... Hmm Hmm...

Reviews

[Tashida]

It seems like every poem I read by you is even better than the last (if that's possible because they're already all kinds of awesome ;) This poem perfectly depicted the cycle of a relationship that we all have been through or will go through at one point or another in our life. Loved it :)

[sinNsincerity]

My pleasure Tashida, I'm glad you loved it.

[aLittlePain]

'Loving you was like having a leg cramp...' lol I chuckled at that, great line and overall a uniquely relatable
piece, I enjoyed this very much. Regards Ray

[sinNsincerity]

I'm glad that you could chuckle at it and that you'd enjoyed it Ray hehe

[V]

I dig your style. Very interesting and innovative choice of words. I had to smirk a little at "loving you was like having a leg cramp". But enjoyable read.

[sinNsincerity]

Why thank you Vanessa, I highly appreciate that and am glad that it could bring a smile. All worth it!

[V]

It certainly did. You're very welcome.

[ManasaC]

A very nice write.
"So we hung in there just as a half torn ligament" I found extremely this very funny but it does have that bitterness of truth attached to it. Staying together after people have grown apart is nothing but painful. I Enjoyed reading it. Good job!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Manasa, I'm glad that you enjoyed it.

[Lauren_The_Awesome]

Loved this poem. Very good job :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Lauren.

[Emily]

Lovely poem!
I really liked the meaning!
Keep it up!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Emily, I'm glad that you did.

[wordman]

somehow you just know,the feelings just fade

[sinNsincerity]

Indeed we do...

[Paul Bell]

Now you really are sure this is over. I mean, a little leg cramp, you get over that by kicking and rubbing a bit.
Are you really sure this is the last straw, cos i think it's going okay.
Why are your bags packed, you never mentioned you were going on holiday.
Now you are sure aren't you, Cos those Hmms, think you still want me.

[sinNsincerity]

Yea, I'm sure...

[Meraki]

I agree with Tabby, in fact she took the words right out of my mouth. Wonderfully executed. The imagery was great I could see the thoughts flickering in her head. I saw the entire end of that relationship.

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you, I appreciate that.

[zaisham9393]

Absolutely beautiful!!Thank you for sharing such a well written poem!!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Zaisha!

[zaisham9393]

You're welcome !

[guy drori]

"A new ending," liked that line, and I smiled when I read the ending.
Nice write :)

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you Guy, I'm glad that it did.