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The labyrinth of your heart painted  

Shadows I could no longer decipher.

Loving you was like having a leg cramp while I slept.

Please, no, wait a sec.

Ouch!

There was no way for me to interject,

So we hung in there just as a half torn ligament.

Let's tear it.

Do you fear it?

Scary.

Could you bare it if we called it quits?

But it's too late!

End of the ninth inning.

Ms. Brexit.

You reached it.

A new ending.

And I'm beyond having a fit.

Excellent doubt.

Hmm Hmm... Hmm Hmm...

Reviews

[Tashida]

It seems like every poem I read by you is even better than the last (if that's possible because they're already all kinds of awesome ;) This poem perfectly depicted the cycle of a relationship that we all have been through or will go through at one point or another in our life. Loved it :)

[sinNsincerity]

My pleasure Tashida, I'm glad you loved it.

[Alaska]

The labyrinth of your heart painted....
my friend i don't think that labyrinth could every be solved.

[sinNsincerity]

If you find the center...

[Dr. YumnaKay]

I like the idea of loving someone which feels like a leg cramp. Its unique but touching and realistic. Love does gives us pain where we don't imagine it would. Great read!

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you for thinking so Yumma!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome :)

[Raylene]

I love this it shows that women do try harder than men to hold on to the relationship and the affects on both sides.

[sinNsincerity]

I think each situation is different and an individual such as myself tries just as hard...

[Raylene]

True but in most cases

[Addict With a Pen]

I love the analogy of the sudden and irreversible love and a leg cramp. A great visual and an absolutely perfect comparison.
The whole message of this piece is great!

[sinNsincerity]

I'm so glad that you did enjoy it!

[Valentine]

After watching the World Series and seeing the Indians lose in the "ninth inning", that was more than having a leg cramp and calling it quits. Sorry some of your lines brought back last nights game. Valentine Guess you can guess who I wanted to win?

[sinNsincerity]

I was rooting for the Indians as well because the Cubs demolished my Dodgers hehe
Thank you for reading Valentine!

[Tabby Mac]

I like this poem for so many reasons. First, I feel it exposes the differences between men and women in relationships. Women tend to hold on longer than they should, whatever the case. I feel as a woman myself we let go slowly until a switch has been flicked, then our decision is simple except the escape or departure.

Let's tear it.....
Could you bare it if we called it quits?

These lines illustrate my thoughts perfectly....the woman takes time to contemplate how he will respond. Maybe she even asks him boldly?.....the sad or most interesting part is the man either never sees it coming or thinks there is still hope...( insert evil laughter or compassion your choice)
The secrets of a woman's heart revealed most eloquently.
I read the the hmm..hmm...hmm...hmm in my head as the last hoora as she tells him goodbye she's only listening to appease him, shaking her head saying whatever in her mind.....she's still leaving after he gets through his explanations

LOVE THIS!
Thanks for sharing!
Tabby

[sinNsincerity]

Thank you so much for your insight and honesty Tabby, I admire women to the highest extent and respect so much. I have always known that I can lean so much from you all and will continue to do so. There has never been a sore bone inside of me whenever a relationship did not pan out because the joy, love, and lessons learned are always worth the misery for me.
Such a pleasure to hear you side of the spectrum and I dearly appreciate it!
-David

[Marina]

Excellent piece. Thought provoking and great imagery along that makes the message all the more clearer!
p.s: Leg cramps are annoying.

[sinNsincerity]

A pleasure Marina, thank you so much, and I am so glad that you enjoyed it.
And they really are- especially when you're asleep.
Finger cramps slay me though lol

[Marina]

hahaha never had one, sounds nasty
You're welcome!