Lone drop of rain

Lone drop of rain

A Poem by Enigma
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One of my best works, I think.

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I am this lone drop of rain
The clouds have gone away, again
The bright sunlight burns my skin
As if happiness is itself a sin
I always wanted to fly free
To try to be the real "me"
Not let the winds blow me dry
I got the will, I got to try

But I am this lone drop of rain
Sailing the desert winds in pain
All alone, none like me in sight
The burning days; the freezing nights
One dune to the next, wandering aimlessly
I have, with myself, my own sympathy
Blanketed by dark, sorrowful stars
With their dead gloom, twinkling they are

I am but this lone drop of rain
On a green leaf, muddy and stained
With the likes of me all around
Majestic scenes, a paradise I found
The peace and joy were, alas, brief
For I was a stain, not a pearl on leaf
I wanted to cry out loud
Why I was still alone in the crowd
I left the forest of smiling drops
My heart broke with tiny pops
Still aimless and wandering, still alone
Searching for a place that could be my home
For now, I was ugly, didn't expect much
Muddied, I was too disgusting to touch
I traveled the world, none I found
Who'd accept me without judging on any ground
Acceptance, you see, is hard to expect
For one, like me, an easy target of neglect
I still wander, a lone drop of rain
Hoping my journey didn't go in vain 

© 2010 Enigma


Author's Note

Enigma
Now this is serious work. I can't alter the position of image somehow so sorry for the wrong placement, lol. But mainly, please tell me about the poem. Constructive criticism welcome.. :)

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"I traveled the world, none I found
Who'd accept me without judging on any ground
Acceptance, you see, is hard to expect
For one, like me, an easy target of neglect
I still wander, a lone drop of rain
Hoping my journey didn't go in vain "
i loved those lines a lot
but great work !! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Your poem gave me shelter for my own similar feelings n' longings n' thoughts! It's so easy sometimes in this crowded world to feel alone n' lost....Your poem inspired me to keep reaching out, to keep my heart open, no matter how wounded it might get. ㋡

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The picture is as beautiful as the thoughts behind your words .. you write with a willing pen. Maybe you could avoid rhyming for rhyming's sake, just let the words flow, not battle for specifics. Otherwise, the thought of this lone drop of rain .. you .. travelling on and on to find the perfect home is quite a thought.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nicely presented. Earnest and honest, it's easy to see that you wrote this from the heart. It's a bit verbose and might do better with some tightening. Some expressions seem to have been forced in just to complete the rhyme. Also the juxtapositions of verb and noun, e.g., 'none I found' seem somewhat archaic in modern poetry.

You have talent. Keep writing.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"I traveled the world, none I found
Who'd accept me without judging on any ground
Acceptance, you see, is hard to expect
For one, like me, an easy target of neglect
I still wander, a lone drop of rain
Hoping my journey didn't go in vain "
i loved those lines a lot
but great work !! :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful piece love! That lone drop of rain though can immerse itself with the ocean....therefore becoming a myriad influences! Stunning poem! xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

you
are
magnificent!


Posted 13 Years Ago


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TJ
this a great Siya. To watch the journey of this raindrop. it desires freedom but with freedom comes lonliness and when he finds company he still feels alone. so afraid of judgment of others. what a great metaphor
good work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Your poetry is simply amazing, the words are just so descriptive and the meaning so simple, yet beautiful. You made a tiny, unnoticed thing become huge. It was beautiful, you're a wonderful poet.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

love it

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

your right - this is serious work.

While reading it I kept thinking how it really belonged in a book!
amazing work, it flowed so perfectly and with such description as you have done, that can be quite a task.

FANTASTIC..this is definately another one for my favourites =]

~Wandering Soul~ xxx

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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