One moment of freedom

First hand experience in second hand freedom.

If I were to die tomorrow…

 

I would walk down the busy street

In my favorite child-like fashion

Not strut but skip

Not bend but flip

I’d walk like I’ve never walked down the busy street

 

I would stare each stranger in the eye

With a bright smile on my face

I won’t care if they think me daft

For eye contact is such a craft

I’ll gladly hug them and walk my way

 

You’d see me skipping like a little girl

Muddy slippers and a flowy frock

My hair at the mercy of the wind

Oh so gentle

Oh so ticklish

You’ll hear me giggle

With or without a reason

Whirl around on the stage

Dance without knowing the steps

Feel the freedom gushing through my being

You will see me

Finding the oddest sight ever

But then, you will truly enjoy

When you live that sensation through me

First hand experience at second hand freedom

And trust me,

You will tap your fingers to my silent beat

Soon enough, my friend.

Soon enough.

 

When I will be gone

This memory of a day will stay

In millions of unknown hearts

I would sail through the dewy clouds

Knowing and content

In leaving behind a mark

Be it a day

Be it a whole life.

 

A moment of utter freedom

Is all it takes

To leave behind the unwritten message

“I was here.”

Author's Note

Another breach into a world of new topics. The line I have put up in the description is something that struck me while (yes, it true), playing grand theft auto: liberty city. The pre-recorded radio-jockey said the lines "..first hand experience in second hand love..". I loved this line. (can you love a line?)
So anyway, how was the poem? :)

Reviews

[emmajoy]

You're a girl after my own heart! What a lovely, free, adventurous, happy heart you have, and your words paint such a wonderful, wonderful picture. Through you i feel the smile that dances with true contentment .. 'A moment of utter freedom ~ Is all it takes ~ To leave behind the unwritten message ~ “I was here"

[Honourfish]

I went to read this poem thinking it was new one then when i got to it and started reading I thought, hang on a minute this is vaguely familiar! but i still loved it and its as good as the first time i read it :)

[light and ashes]

Yes you can love a line. This is a truly brilliant poem,"first hand experience at second hand freedom" A brilliant line for the basis of this poem! Leaving a mark on the world by being free for all the world to see. Making a difference in someone's life through a hug,a smile, and showing them how to be free. Some likely would follow your example, hopefully. Wonderful poem :]

[Sweets]

You're so creative...I truly loved the idea of writing something about a childhood memory that you've always wanted to do, and I love grand theft auto too D:
especially when I kill people ._. so yea, this poem was great! and I loved when you described what you wore and about the hair that the wind runs through. Great work! :)

[Becky C Strukamp]

Love the font for this poem. The poem is so full of energy and free spirited such as the font. It works very well. Beautifully penned. I enjoyed it immensely.

[Little Miss]

What a beautiful happy poem:) It`s so light and carefree:) Its wonderful

Loved it!

[alternative_be]

It has been a long time since I have been here to review or to write. Surfing to this site was like opening Pandora's box! This is such a nice surprise! Your writing is certainly evolving! This was a pleasure to read, going with the flow as you go!
Very well done indeed!

[Lively]

Very lovely, true and comes straight to the heart........

[Lissianna]

Beautiful!