Remembering ~ A Trio of Senryus

Remembering ~ A Trio of Senryus

A Poem by SleeplessVolcano

Moonlight fills my soul
missing you is my solace ~
is sunrise my foe?

Waves wash over me
my heart is treading water ~
no solid ground here.

I'll remember you
While I'm forgetting myself ~
how do I go on?


© 2021 SleeplessVolcano


Author's Note

SleeplessVolcano
Scetch in pencil, by Jacob Pierneef.

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Wow dear friend. All three poems were amazing. You gave life to the sea and the moonlight. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. I did like them.
Coyote

Posted 1 Month Ago


One of the best aspects is your questioning, something hardly ever done in these short forms. This makes it feel as if the narrator has a gazillion agonies tugging on the soul. This is the most heart-tugging sensation I've ever got from a haiku/senryu. Usually poems of this form seem more cerebral & sterile, but yours is a grabber & a wringer (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 1 Month Ago


haunting .. brings lonely times to me nog and heart :( the sketch fits ..the colors stark yet it still has warmth ... I would say the third in the three is a haiku not senryu ... i only say that to help me keep them straight .. i can't tell you how many times i keep looking them up .. in the first, your line "is sunrise my foe?" especially catches my attention .. have not seen a question in either senryu or haiku .. but of course i haven't read all there are just yet ;) very emotive trio ...universal and relatable for sure .. glad i stopped my friend..i am going to be thinking about that line today ... pondering the sunrise
E.

Posted 1 Month Ago


SleeplessVolcano

1 Month Ago

Thanks for stopping by my friend. There are conflicing opinions on what constitutes a senryu vs a h.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Month Ago

oops .. had to look them up again .. i got it backwards .. haiku are about Nature and senryu about h.. read more

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