you lose

you were my everything until u left

you never shead a tear

you watched me fall apart in your hands

and said you lose

well now its been 2 years i finally moved on
all you say is i want you back

and that you cant leave me be

all i can say is you lose

last night you call

 we scream and we fight

i told you i want you out of my life

this time old love

 YOU LOSE

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like when the karma of life is returned. People learn they held a good person in their life too late. I did like the strong ending. People rarely will change. Best to escape before the pain will be repeated. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Clarisse Nanoit]

This happens all too often. I like the concept, for sure--the irony. It kinda reminds me of my poem "Love Me, Right?" in its subject matter if nothing else. I think you could use more eloquent language to express your ideas and make this into an all-around great piece. =)
KH

[luna11]

I love this poem. It's great.
But you haven't capitalised your 'I's and you wrote 'u' instead of 'you' in the first line. There is no punctuation...
But other than that, I love it. It has a good rhythm and flow.
Well done
xx