Puzzle

I lay in pain, in solitude

And I see the light beyond the surface

There is a sense of peace, shared between two souls

My nonsense does not reach a conclusion

It is only a journey, forever walked

Destination just out of reach, yet so far away

And when I die, the pieces will be held in the palm of my hand

And I will know true happiness.

Reviews

[redzone]

your poem made me think of those dreams where you are running, trying to get away from some monster and getting no where except eaten, and then you wake up, looking around the room to make sure there are no monsters.. funny maybe, but living in this system makes you have dreams like that.. hope you can tell I enjoyed your poem and where it took me. ~~~~redzone

[Akira Kodama]

Thanks for the piece of mind

[VertoAtrum]

I like this one a lot. It's very interesting.

[Poetic Beauty]

This poem made me think of someone who has a terminal illness. The pain is searing and the otherside is just out of reach. The end is near but still galaxies away. This was a powerful write and the word choice make it a deep thinking piece.

[Akira Kodama]

Good review.

[Poetic Beauty]

When I review I just tell the poet how the piece made me feel or what it made me think of because to me really that is what poetry is about emotions and perception. I am glad you liked this review.

[Akira Kodama]

That's what it should be, I think. Structure and that is all good but the spacing, flow, etc is not part of the true expression and I don't think it should be what's focused on when interpreting someone else's work.

[Poetic Beauty]

I agree. I write a lot of free verse. When I first started I did the whole rhythm and rhyme and never thought of writing free verse. Now I love it. I also chose not to us punctuation unless I think it is a necessity. I don't want to distract from the words themselves.

[Akira Kodama]

Free verse is really all I write now, unless I'm writing a song. Even then, it can still work.

[Shaquana Adams]

This poem made me think of the end of Titanic, when Rose finally got to be with Jack. Maybe I'm off, but regardless this is a really good poem :)

[Akira Kodama]

Hmm, well you're the closest than anyone has gotten to my intentions with this.

[Shaquana Adams]

Haha. Yay for me :)

[justjenn_2u]

Some things we will never know and aren't mean't to know. I am a dark poet so I can relate and basically just say in such a short poem, you have summed up how it feels to be alone in this hard life.

[Akira Kodama]

It's interesting to see how people are interpreting this.

[justjenn_2u]

Our minds are a complete puzzle. I look at things through my personal lense and I many not always be right.