MY ROOM

Just paying thanks this way to the most desirable though untidy place.

The place which is literally a 'mess'
& sometimes become matter of gaze!
Towel on the bed,
Food lying on mat,
Clothes outside the closet
and, to design it better
a little dust is all set.
These results stress in my head
Specially when mum comes to see the rest!

Apart, the best company to be with,
Which overrides the wicked thoughts
And, uprise the positive I brought
It heals my pain,
It cheers my success,
It is souvenir
There all the time with loneliness.

-sneh

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'MY ROOM'
-sneh,This descriptive inner soul feeling housed within a place is really refreshing. I remember my own room as a teenager. My family moved and then myself and siblings, we three sisters were able to each have our own bedroom. It was so nice. I can still remember enjoying the solitude and a place of my own to read or just listen to music. I did my homework too.I can identify with how it looked as it was not always tidy. I did a major cleaning about every month. Your poem focuses on the inner you and how you own place is a refuge. Oh I like that so much!
Blessings to you.
Kathy

[Sneh]

Wow! Refreshed with your review.
Same I do cleanings weekly that too seems to be a huge burden. Though our room is our room, irreplaceable! Thanks for sharing stunning memories, glad you liked it..
Sneh

[barleygirl]

V1 sounds like a young person living under parent(s) roof, vividly shown with sharp details we can relate to, remembering childhood bedroom messes! But as V2 veers beyond the physicality of an actual room, your poem feels like it's describing an "inner room" where the narrator can be him/herself. I love your two-sided msg & I agree that having a place to hide out & let it out is needed, even by animals . . . each pet has her favorite place to get some space! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Sneh]

Thanks Margie

[Amada]

After A flying chappal received from mom, coz towel is on the bed.

[Chris Shaw]

Whatever makes you feel most comfortable, that's what counts. It's you that has to live in it. Too much organisation can do some people's heads in. I like a lived in home, not a showhome. Good poem.

Chris

[Sneh]

Well, that's true. I appreciate your choice.Thanks for the read and review!!
Sneh

[Coyote Poetry]

We need our space. Clean, organized or dirty. Our place to rest and feel okay. I liked your use of description. You made the reader believe every word. Thank you Sneh for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sneh]

Indeed coyote, it really matters to be with ourselves. Overwhelmed by your kind words.
Thanks!!
Sneh

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome Sneh.