A Sunflower in the Shade

A Sunflower in the Shade

By: Adam M. Snow

 

O' ye Countess draped in sorrow,

Grasping fear of coming morrow.

With eyes like those of torment slave,

Sad innocence, yet herself she gave.

Living in shadows of sun cast,

As if no soul of solstice passed.

Gentles thy heart that long to be seen,

Urge thine life into worlds between.

Withering away like a sunflower in shade,

Consumed by life, embarrassed and afraid.

But thy lives only bitter affliction,

Crossed my path into my reflection.

Baring the weight of worlds upon thee,

Living life as it were meant to be.

But this be not a wakeful day,

The broad stream bore her far away.

In the shadows thus she remain,

Upon the ledge thy window pane.

She looks out unto the land,

They know not understand,

But O' ye Countess draped in despair,

Sight of her like stillness in the air.

Reviews

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

O how I love this, i love how you use your words "O' ye... thy... thee", and the rhyming is really great. The tittle itself is really nice and catchy. I'm not positive but maybe a lil typo on this line at the end "They no not understand," they do not understand? I enjoyed reading this a lot, i love the style of it. Thank you for my comment, hope you like mine (comment). :D

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Very beautiful love your style

[Kathrin]

This is beautiful. Your use of words and rhyme is graceful.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Perfect, the rhythm and imagery are beyond excellent.

[Jazique]

O well that was wonderful I mean how the words just went together and the descriptions and all were just magnificent. They way you wrote in your own way as your words flowed in such, a rhythm way that spoke themselves. It was very creative poem on your part and I enjoyed the end of her like stillness in the air. Well done at writing this as I believed it to be a bit sad but, very interesting like a story in its self.

[Joshua Donahue]

Nice style. Nice concept. Nice choice of words. Very nice! :))

[Daytonight]

Very beautiful. A real old world elegance to it! Keep on penning.

[Farrah Grahm]

Very chilling. Haunting and beautiful. Your imagery is astounding. Your words are like lyrics. Your use of anachronistic language risks sounding pompous and outdated but somehow it works. I love this

[Raven Starhawk]

The title itself seemed to enchant me but then as I started to read I found the body of this poem like a exotic fruit I could not get enough of.

Excellent poem. Very perfect. Great expressions.