Masquerade

Masquerade
By: Adam M. Snow

Hiding our faces, we choose who we are;
living the lies, stricken so far.
We know not of what is to come-
a lowly burn from a shallow numb.
We dance around this world so dark,
living now these lives embark.
We hide our face with the mask we wear,
afraid of life and unaware
of the melody life can bring
and the joy of newborn spring.
Why must we hide from ourselves;
driven into grave delves?
But what do we hide from,
that or less to come;
misery or love or life alone?
As common as it is unknown.
Why must we hide?
If not we feel it inside
from truth of thousand lies;
we hide our soul our eyes.

Reviews

[Shelly Braen]

Beautiful, so raw and true. For what ever the reason our masks are in place, there is one common denominator...fear. There is not enough air to beathe behind such masks, dulling our senses. The last verse was to be held most high, for the beauty so unknown is so terribly sad to miss. Lovely, lovely write!

[Victorious]

The central idea has been passed down since ages. The idea of the mask and the dance of mask in masquerade that becomes pointless carousels. Indeed the question is true, what do we hide from and why do we form these masks? Why do we deter from the obstacles that are inevitable such as "misery or love or life alone" basically our fears. "Why must we hide?" Is a good question to ask lol when the fear will carousel around.

However, I noticed your attempts to meet rhythm. Some of the diction is off like the words "stricken" "numb" and "embark" they seem squeezed in there. The word stricken is an adjective, not a verb. Therefore, it appears odd. The word numb is a an adjective as well and to use it as a noun, you transform it to numbness. I don't understand what a "shallow numb" is honestly. Then embark is connoted to ships, docks, and so on, but then again you might have meant to connect embark to things of the sea, ready to brave the stormy waves of life. If not.

I didn't understand this line either, "But what do we hide from/that or less to come;" what "that" are you referring to?

Otherwise, I like the change in hiding from things that are good. It's a bit refreshing because people stay in the dark so long, the light becomes evil.

So nice job.

Sincerely Livana Lowell (LL)

God Bless

[TheConjuringCat]

I love this so much. Beautifully written and increadbly profound. :)

[T.W. Early]

beautiful and very well written.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

We wear many masks and don them for whoever we are around at the time. Truly not even the ones who think they know us best, know us completely. No one ever takes off every mask for another person except sometimes themselves and they look in the mirror and what do they see? Excellent piece!

[Jupiter Jazz]

That was cool. An honest portrayal of human nature =)

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A delightful mesh of emotion, intelligence and sheer unforced will, a triumph, well done, good read.

[Brytt]

We hide our face with the mask we wear,/ afraid of life and unaware...

Perfect. Love how this poem thinks!

[Becky C Strukamp]

The masks we wear! "Why must we hide from ourselves" Love that line, so true,

Excelllent write.

[Poetic Beauty]

There are some strong and important questions in this poem. Why do we pretend to be someone we are not? There are many answers to that question and each person will have a different reason for hiding. I love the outspokenness of this piece

[Demi Rose]

epic and deep.