His dear family

His dear family

A Poem by HeazerH

Stepping on his toes at every step
Then you need to point out he's inept
You're living in his way

Pointing and jeering at his every flaw
Judged solely by conclusions drawn
You're living in his way

Begging against hope to catch a break
If only you knew what's at stake
You're living in his way

© 2014 HeazerH


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"You're living in his way"
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It speaks of someone brilliant being put down for simply thinking differently.
Well played.

Posted 9 Years Ago


i couldn't agree more. everyone has flaws but being able to tolerate each other is the ability most families lack. good write

Posted 9 Years Ago


HeazerH

9 Years Ago

Thanks :). :)
Jamil Isimbabi

9 Years Ago

welcome :))
Yea...sometimes family can be like that. Of course, some people are lucky and end up with relatives that are really supportive.

I like the way you conveyed the message in this one. The repetition of the line "you're living in his way" was really well done. It conjured an image in my mind of a bird that cannot fly because of all those that crowd around it.

Nicely done.

-Caradoc

Posted 9 Years Ago


HeazerH

9 Years Ago

I liked the image of the bird, thank you. That image hat you got is exactly what has happened. Somet.. read more
Caradoc

9 Years Ago

Indeed. You're very welcome. Have a good one. :)
is this parenting at it`s worst nagging at it`s best or just life for most

Posted 9 Years Ago


HeazerH

9 Years Ago

Yeah, I am thankful for the parents that have been there for me. In my case, they arent biological, .. read more
 wordman

9 Years Ago

oh hell I`m the last one to give advise just older and wiser
HeazerH

9 Years Ago

I envy those that are older and wiser. I don't wish my life away, but I look forward to the knowledg.. read more
"Begging against hope to catch a break
If only you knew what's at stake
You're living in his way"

You write marvelously. Pen on...:).........


Posted 9 Years Ago


HeazerH

9 Years Ago

Thanks a bunch! :)
Sami Khalil

9 Years Ago

Welcome a bunch...:)...................
Begging against hope to catch a break
If only you knew what's at stake
You're living in his way

Neatly Writen piece and above verses felt deeply in heart...good job my friend




Posted 9 Years Ago


HeazerH

9 Years Ago

Thank you :). :)

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