The Dark War

The Dark War

A Poem by SonOfPlunder
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Something that i wrote years ago whilst studying World war one poetry

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I grip my gun, the stock slick with mud
my feet are torn, smeared in blood

My breath is rancid, reeking of death
could I really be the last one left?

I close my eyes, squeeze them tight
there must be a way to make this right

I take a step and feel the ground shake
It’s almost too much to anticipate

I make my way around the bend
almost too hard to believe these were my friends

Mutilated corpses and scattered gore
someone above must be keeping score

I see the light, I’m almost there
I squint my eyes against the flare

I take a breath and muster my strength
this is a war that no one can win


© 2014 SonOfPlunder


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Vividly portrayed and empathetically insightful. I like the last line, the dawning realisation is probably a common recurring thought among those faced with death whom have been drafted into such wars.

Posted 5 Years Ago


SonOfPlunder

5 Years Ago

Thank you, glad you liked it!
hmmmmm.... zombie apocalypse??

Posted 5 Years Ago


SonOfPlunder

5 Years Ago

Could well be! Though when i wrote this i had the trenches from WWI in my mind
Love it
I had to finish it once I started :D


Posted 5 Years Ago


You are a really great writer, don't stop!

Posted 5 Years Ago


SonOfPlunder

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much!
Very well done, the images vivid and flow superb. Well done, my friend!

Posted 5 Years Ago


SonOfPlunder

5 Years Ago

Thank you again K, as always :)
Ghost of Jupiter

5 Years Ago

Of corse, :)
Very strong imagery here for me. Not only physical imagery, but emotional as well. I myself am weak with poetry, and so I'm continually amazed by the rhyming and flow abilities some authors can demonstrate. This one was a perfect example. I can't pick one favorite line here, as they all together work to build the image. Spoken very powerfully, in so few words.
Bravo.
100/100

Posted 5 Years Ago


SonOfPlunder

5 Years Ago

Wow, thank you very much, that is a seriously huge compliment :)
Your visualization was grand indeed. Always great to paint the eerie image in the minds of others. Keep up the great work

Posted 5 Years Ago


Really enjoyed the dark visuals, was chilling good work

Posted 5 Years Ago


SonOfPlunder

5 Years Ago

Thank you! Glad you enjoyed it
Such a vivid image you paint, excellent work :) x

Posted 5 Years Ago


SonOfPlunder

5 Years Ago

Thank you very much! That's very flattering considering your work is excellent and you have some bri.. read more
Tina Louise

5 Years Ago

Thank you, welcome hunni :) x

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SonOfPlunder
SonOfPlunder

Cardiff, Wales, United Kingdom



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29 year old amateur fantasy writer and dark poet from Cardiff, South Wales. Currently working on a novel with the intention of eventually making it into an expanding series. more..

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