Badger Rave

My first attempt at something a bit more different and surreal from what i usually write

I slipped my hand into my pocket

Took out my nights entertainment

Pressed it on my tongue and felt the excitement flow 

As i walked through the streets, i felt it build up in me

Like a wave, a heightened sense of things

I was almost floating, on a cushion of care free air

In the party, the room was thick with smoke and sweaty bodies

The excitement in the air was tangible, the music filled my ears

Then the colours faded, and i felt a cold chill pass over me

The person in front turned his head, looked at me and my heart missed a beat

He was a badger, black and white all over, his gleeful grin clear on his face

I turned my gaze around the room and i saw, they were all badgers

Badgers, dancing blissfully to the music, feeling the ebb and flow of the night

I looked down at my hands, i was not surprised by what i saw

Black and white stripes covered them, i was one of the crowd

So tonight, i was a badger, we were badgers and this was our rave

Author's Note

I wrote this after a conversation went bizarre and i told someone i had badgers living in my head. So, there we go!

Reviews

[Scott Cockwell]

This is totally random, but awesome. If you didn't have "Badger" in the title, I would have been pleasantly surprised!
I just have this image of a group of human-sized badgers swaying back and forth to some chilled beat.

[SonOfPlunder]

Hah, it is completely random, it was derived from a conversation on here yesterday evening. What can i say, badgers just love a bit of drum and bass! Thanks though, glad you liked it!

[Nusquam Esse]

I really enjoy abstract work, stuff which scorns reality and pushes the boundaries of creativity. I could see the badgers in this one, and I particularly enjoyed the image of them smiling. Great job on this one; here are a few typos and improvements I would personally suggest.

you are missing an apostrophe in night's entertainment
And since you repeat "As I walked" twice, I might consider a different choice of words for one of em.
put a comma after 'looked at me'

Again, excellent job on this one; well worth my time. Unique and enjoyable prose!

[SonOfPlunder]

Thank you very much! Not my usual kind of write, but something that i was inspired to write due a conversation on here yesterday evening. I usually proof read things, but this one was just put up as raw, so to speak. Again, thanks for the advice! :)

[Nusquam Esse]

No probs, I honestly need to do a good solid copy-edit on my own work. I don't even follow my own advice! >__> for shame really... I have vowed to give it all a good rundown once I finish my 20th short story; which should not be much longer.

[SonOfPlunder]

Lol I think on this site, the odd spelling mistake and grammatical error don't really matter too much. If something is ever spotted and flagged for publication, then it would be corrected before anyhow. That's a hell of a lot to go through and edit though!

[Nusquam Esse]

Some things are worth the time... ;)

[SonOfPlunder]

This is true :)

[HeazerH]

This ....is...awesome. Haha it was a fun story that reminds me of more carefree youthful days ;)

[SonOfPlunder]

This was inspired because of that random conversation last night involving badgers lol I can relate to that also ;)

[HeazerH]

Oh haha yeah....i still go out some, but I have a two year old so most the shenanigans involve toddler stuff instead of parties.

[SonOfPlunder]

Ah i can definitely see that cutting back on the partying!

[HeazerH]

Yeah but I'm glad i had him, and he was well planned lol so it's worth it.

[SonOfPlunder]

Oh definitely! Have to make the next generation of writers after all ;)

[HeazerH]

Awwwe yeah, I hope he likes writing. He seems to like exersize a lot but it could change.

[SonOfPlunder]

You never know ;)

[HeazerH]

Haha true...i kind of hope he becomes a jui jitsu kid like his dad lol but of course I also hope he inherits my love of writing.

[Tina Louise UK]

omg that badger video drives me nuts, should have posted it along with this lol....enjoyed this one hun :) x

[SonOfPlunder]

Lol i hated that video too. My first random piece, glad you liked it

[Ghost of Jupiter]

We are all badgers though aren't we? lol... the bigger question here is ... where can i get some of what you took that night? lol ;) We need glow sticks...

[SonOfPlunder]

Glow sticks are doable. But this stuff was created by badgers who were taught to make acid by hippies from the 60's. Unfortunately they're all dead now, or they have gone crazy and are in a badger retirement home

[Ghost of Jupiter]

I think I ran into some the other day...they were all decked out in tie dye and where saying something about some crazy guy from WALES lol... that they lived inside his head or something like that... i just thought they were high. Who knew, small world right?!

[SonOfPlunder]

So that's where they've been! Tell them to get their black and white asses over here. They have work to do!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

They are on their way... it might be a while though... they are making me some... um...stuff...lol

[isus]

yeah, love this trip! always write surreal :D rave on :D

[SonOfPlunder]

My first attempt at something surreal. And all because of that conversation..hahaha

[isus]

its only the beggining :D

[SonOfPlunder]

Heh could well be!

[HeazerH]

Surreal is awesome and you seem good at it...on a side not, that was almost a typo of hood at it...I almost left it bc for some reason (idk) why I found it a funny typo.