Ghazal

Ghazal

A Poem by Sonia Aurelio
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11 syllables... i think? lol

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Ghazal

 

 

 

Eyes trace curves of mountain ranges, whose valleys

cascade beneath dusk light of peeking moon’s sight

           

                Peering from sweat trickling creases, collapsing

origami chest implodes, exhaling steamed

 

breath near salt wrung tears tune lustful chords

vocal tunning, subtle strum, river gorge, come

 

pearl ribbons escape fiery hard wick, tip

                cupped by velvet draft, once pursed lips part, oozing

 

                tongue dimples swell, lapped to pulsing shaft, swallow

                you pure, whisking diamonds in cream rendered night

 

 

 

© 2012 Sonia Aurelio


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I like the beginning ... It is real nice... Thank you for sharing...

Posted 8 Years Ago


I know this isn't a traditional Ghazal, but who sticks to conventions these days? Gotta make it new right? Anyways, just took the five couplets aspect and all lines have the same amount of syllables in them technique and drew on that! Thanks for your reviews guys! appreciate it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


A very nice Ghazal indeed. I find it too difficult in English to give it the spirit of the Ghazal as in Arabic, but you have done loverly here :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a poem it was fantastic!greatly done!keep it up!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Sonia Aurelio
Sonia Aurelio

Auckland, New Zealand



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I'm a painter at heart, and an aspiring poet. As a sculptor of words, I have a responsibility to be true to myself and to you as my readers. I intend to carve the world through the eyes of an innocent.. more..

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